Out of this world love ~ Senryu

That prayer came back now

When you held me in your arms ~

such love is not ours.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it's like we are blessed to have a true love...something that we don't own...and yet we are grateful just to borrow the feelings for as long as they last.
lots said in three lines.
this form expects the poet to be brief and leave a lot between the lines...you do that well.
j.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thanks Jacob.
Yes, it surely is a blessing. I'm struggling to write short stories and novels and having a go at these shorter poetic forms helps me how to focus more on that "between the lines" bit.

[Ardra]

Mmmm why do I feel a sentiment of conflict in this poem...Or am I not reading it correctly... :)

[SleeplessVolcano]

no conflict at all :)

[Ardra]

Heheh so I did not get what you were trying to say :p