Into Eternity

Into Eternity

A Poem by CM-Stars

I ease in
Feeling the heat
Encircle my body,
Wrapped in its warmth.
My thoughts
Escape me and
Flutter away.
I'm bathed
In my sighs.
The surface ripples
As I tense up
Then release.
My eyes close
As I sink
Into eternity.

© 2018 CM-Stars



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That is very deep it almost feels like a dream in reality I wish could take place in my life to be bathed in a warmth of eternity. It's a very magical thing for those to hold such a desired gift to express a beauty only they created. Yes, they :) You hold depth never let that go.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


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4/6/18
1:28 PM U.S. CST
"My Review of Into Eternity by Charlotte, A Fellow Writer's Café Author"
by PB Jacobs (www.writerscafe.org)

Remember the phrase "Calgon, take me away?" This is my first awareness that lead's to a thought, as I look your poem over.

The definitive mauser, huh? Could you be all tuckered out from mausering cocktail hour, one way or the other? Or, could it be you taking your feelings the wrong way? A person doesn't have to feel serious to be serious, you see. That's my take on things.

Yeah, I'm zeroing in on your picture, but don't freak, I do get task environment social logic constraint's, so yes, I'm being objective about your work. Is the picture you display an alter ego thing? The work I see, above, doesn't match the picture, so I think, but does it? Feisty kittie?

Yeah, it's a good thing when author's take a mental snapshot of what's in front of them and write about it. Healthy people DO go with what's in front of them, kind of...

PB Jacobs

Posted 2 Months Ago


This poem is a great way to compare going below the warm bath water to losing your self into an abyss of emptiness. How the stress of your life makes you tense and feel like you are leaving yourself. Amazing work!

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 3 Months Ago


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I can recall slipping away in a hot bath. The thoughts of remaining there forever... enjoyed this piece :)

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Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very poetic descriptions. I could feel the narrator slipping into eternity.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

CM-Stars

3 Months Ago

Thank you for your thoughts!

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Added on March 2, 2018
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Tags: Eternity, afterlife, heaven, faith