Careless Comments

 

 

Careless Comments

 

So many things you have said to me
Things that really did hurt you see
There were times I did forgive you
My love for you was always true

The days they always come and go
Love for me you never do show
I sit here waiting for you every day
But it is always the same old way

Careless comments is all you give
With you it is so hard to live
You treat me like I'm just a toy
Someone just for you to enjoy

I am overcome with so much shame
My feelings of love are not the same

The rain is full of ghost tonight

My world no longer feels alright

 

6-3-08

Reviews

[Deborah Shepard]

so very sad , hugs sis

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I do not like feeling this sort of pain in another....I am sorry that it exists. Very good job with the poem.

[Nassira]

Congratulation for winning the contest :)

[Blue Sky]

Gee, my dear, the things you must endear on account of this one that
treats you in this manner, your poetry is awfully beautifully with such
wonderful graphic, I can't think of any careless comments of your
beautiful work, take care, hope you can move on from this...hugs~

[darkgurl]

A very moving and touching piece here, your write flowed....darkgurl or Kit Kat

[angelinmypocket]

Sue...the message relayed in your write, I think can be related to by more than a few.
In a case like this, love has been taken for granted...and the reason has been forgotten.
Your use of the phrase is felt emotionally...so sad.
Love...Liz/angelinmypocket

[Nassira]

I like the flow with which you are writing your poem. The meaning in your message is deep and touching ... It is a nice write for the contest, I enjoyed reading it :))) Thank you.

[Helena]

I agree wholeheartedly what Tovli and Sharon said. A very beautiful poem indeed!
I couldn't fault it, it flowed well, the sentiments were touching and I understood
the words you were conveying here.

Great work and take on the challenge phrase!

Love and Light
Helena

[Tovli]

a fine poem, nice presentation. the depth is impressive and the flow of the poem is most alluring.

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

There's a real depth to the feelings expressed in your poem that drew me into its lines. You masterfully included the challenge phrase and presented the poem beautifully, too. Thank you very much for entering! Sharon