Embrace

A sonnet expressing life's realization.

Twilight's misty essence slowly breaking,

Bringing radiance of the new found start,

Casting rays of light as it is waking.

Beats weaken from time in the fragile heart. 

Life helps distort mind sets like wounds with puss.

Death holds it's threat above our weary heads.

Wait for the ax to drop and after thus

We lay expired on the feeble beds.

Our narrow piece of life now quickly spent, 

Dreams sit unfulfilled by their blatant end.

Youth's strength once knew the aspired intent,

Now ashes lay inert, no means to mend.

But presently look at the sun abound,

And embrace subtle things not seen profound.

Reviews

[WritersRankings]

You must have been a strange druidic soul to manifest this sort of stuff so young Anna in this lifetime, highly peculiar. I can't really make sense of it. Even when you write sad things, it's as if it's full of love and understanding...a remarkable shade of mindfulness colors most of your work.

[AnnaMae]

Wow, this comment makes me extremely happy. Thank you so much. I really try to construe myself and thoughts in an honest manner when writing, and you just seem to get me. :) Awesome!

[Looouise]

I really love how you begin this poem, it really does capture a fresh beginning, but then it's also really nice because the last line of the first stanza alludes to something old - and you're not sure how old, but it's a heart so it's most definitely older than a new day. :) And the second verse is wonderful; I like the sinister (that could probably be the wrong word to describe it, but nothing's popping into my head) idea of it, death and life and how they work together in a way. And I like how the third stanza goes back to the 'old' nature of the beats of the weakened fragile heart; and how any subject this poem might relate to could have dreams incomplete and a definite loss of youth.

But most of all, I love the couplet at the end and how, while the three stanzas may seem very dark, they bring a new light to the poem. I think it's truly beautiful; live in the moment and relish all that you see before you. :) I just love the nature aspect in that couplet as it really does allude to deeper things in life (like the Romantic poets allude to in their poetry). This is just a lovely poem. :)

[Amelia]

:) aigoo! It's beautiful!!!!

[Just Another Writer]

This is great.. very inspirational and motivating. I liked your word choice and adjectives. You also had some creative metaphors in there as well.. very nice! Keep writing!

[kidd x]

This is really nice, I like this. Enjoyed the rhymes.

[Aarontastic]

It's really refreshing to read an old-school rhymed sonnet on here, because I read (and write) mostly free verse stuff. You did a really nice job with the rhymes; they all feel natural and appropriate instead of contrived, and the meter is the same in every verse. The one thing that I would pick on a little is your couplet at the end; it reads a little bit awkwardly to me, especially 'embrace subtle things never seen profound'. It's always a pain reworking rhymed stuff though and if you keep it as is, it's not like it would be a big deal. I liked your subject matter and you handled it well, getting your point across that we should 'embrace' the tiny things in life, because even if they seem not worth our time when we're young and healthy, they are really what living is all about. Good job

[RachelKim]

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