Friendship

Friendship

A Poem by Sofia
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Just a short poem on friendship..

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An imperishable and unbreakable bond we share,
All the troubles together we bear
When one's hurt the others care,
So strong our bond is that none can tear,

Yes my friend, that's the FRIENDSHIP we share.

© 2017 Sofia



Author's Note

Sofia
A really short poem..i wrote it while completing my school project on friendship.. Please feel free to criticize...I would love to improve on my writing skills..

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lovely words . short poem but cute one

Posted 4 Months Ago


Sofia

4 Months Ago

Haha! Thank you for your lovely visit... I'm glad you stopped by...
Loving, innocent and beautiful little poem. How it touched my heart! Eloquent words with good flow and rhyme. You are very talented poet Sofia. Keep writing!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Sofia

4 Months Ago

I'm really grateful to you ma'am for your wonderful review which encouraged me a lot...thank you :)
Annette Pisano Higley

4 Months Ago

You're so welcome! Keep writing dear!
A wonderful little poetic clip, and a noble sentiment of friendly affection. I enjoyed it.

If you'd like constructive criticism (and I'm by no means any kind of expert), I'd suggest slightly greater care to meter: even with an open style, I find that rhyming syllables helps keep to a beat, which can support pacing, especially important for spoken poetry. However, being such a short poem, that's not as important here. Alliteration and interior rhyme can also enhance memorability, but to me they're purely gravy. :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


Sofia

5 Months Ago

Thank you very much for your kind visit and review. I'm glad you enjoyed. At first, even I thought o.. read more
This is a nice poem that moves the heart with its brevity. Two notes, if I may: Lines 1 and 4 essentially repeat the same idea (which in a poem so brief is not so advisable), and in Line 1 you're missing an article (an "an" at the beginning) or a plural ("bondS") for that line to make sense. Otherwise this is well written with a strong message and good musicality. Well done!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Sofia

5 Months Ago

Thank you for ur kind visit and review. I will surely try my best to avoid these mistakes in future .. read more
Poetry's not my strongsuit, but I like the simplicity of a poem about a subject that's more overlooked than it should be.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Sofia

5 Months Ago

Thank you for checking out this poem...grateful to you for giving it a read :)
Your choice of words are great:)
And I loved your rhyme.
You are a great poet:)
Always happy for you lil' sis:)

Posted 5 Months Ago


Sofia

5 Months Ago

Aww!! Love u sis.. you're so cute...thank you very much siso :)
Neetha

5 Months Ago

My pleasure always:)
aw i love this. it's so simple and brings a warning piece when read, i love it :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


xoxo

5 Months Ago

i meant warming not warning lol
xoxo

5 Months Ago

and peace not piece
Sofia

5 Months Ago

Yeah, I know you meant that...no problem☺
A great poem on friendship, Sofia.....though few in lines, yet enough to explain the meaning of friendship...how lovely your poem is...keep it up, dear.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Sofia

5 Months Ago

Thank you very much!!😊 Nd thank you for making me really happy😊
Priyanshi

5 Months Ago

Always a pleasure...dear
No this is perfect! It shouldnt be longer. Beauty is in simplicity. This defines true friendship something which is rare.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Sofia

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much.. I'm glad that you found it to be perfect😃
This is short and simple in the best of ways. There aren't any frills or overly fancy language because it doesn't need it- it would probably sound out of place.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Sofia

5 Months Ago

Thank you very much for ur kind words..I appreciate it..😃

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Kolkata, West Bengal, India



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