Don't want to hurt.

Don't want to hurt.

A Poem by Somer
"

This doesn't seem right...

"

Will you see my pain,
or leave me to cry,
can you see this frown,
that I try so hard to hide?
Can you tell me what to do,
I feel so lost,
I can't think straight,
this doesn't feel right...

my words are all mixed up,
what did you say?
I can't see the door,
I feel so astray!

Can you help me,

escape the pain?
can you please take it all away?
cause I can't take it anymore,
I need to be free,
just take something,
and end this for me, please...
end it fast and painfree,
I don't want to hurt anymore, you see.

© 2011 Somer


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Somer
Just something I wrote . :P Review? :)

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I can relate to the angst in this poem. I'm sure that all of us at one point or another have felt this way and you captured it in words. It could be applied to relationship break-ups, life's trials and disappointments, or friendships; a good catch-all for this emotion.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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wow. i love love love it. you are fantastic, truly.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really relate to this poem. It affects the inner soul of people and just grabbes that emotion they carry. This is wounderfully great.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can relate to this... Great poem :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I don't often swear when I am reviewing but damn!!!! This poem expressed so much hurt and sorrow, depression and anguish, and most of all heartbreak, it made me want to cry. one rhythm suggestion on this line: or can you please take it all away? Try removing the word or, it flows much better ;-) Great poem and another for the favorites box

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i can connect with the emotions and everything..i believe everyone has felt this way at some point in their life,and if they havent -they will. good work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Angsty and written with a lot of emotion, straight and to the point. a great write, and definetly something I can relate too. Well done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can relate to the angst in this poem. I'm sure that all of us at one point or another have felt this way and you captured it in words. It could be applied to relationship break-ups, life's trials and disappointments, or friendships; a good catch-all for this emotion.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woah, so nicely written

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You're so good at this kind of thing. In all of your work, you have an idea, and as complicated and deep it may be, you express it carefully, and clearly. I totally feel every bit of emotion coming through this. You're a really talented writer:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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