~Extinguish me

Smothered before the flame ignites...

Tiny slits of eye open in void,
Retarded limbs float in fluid.
Unheard beat haunts
The masked sunshine.....

Melted clothes to cover
Her mocked nudity.
Tears echo,blending with
Buried innocence....
Longing fingers reach out,
To be led into World
Full of shrouded prudence....

Intake stalled,cut the cord..
Arms mauled,chop me off!!
Unsung cry,fills brooding sky.
Ohhh!! Traditions so high!

Smothered before birth.
Extinguish me....
Before my fire scorches,
Your prejudiced earth!

Rays dimmed...
Ashes fly...
Over the extinguished fire!!

Author's Note

With the female genocide numbers increasing day by day in my country . Its my duty to do all i can to raise my voice,Its a small attempt to save those innocent lives. Dedicated to all those unborn martyrs.

Reviews

[CA Anurag Sharma]

I find you and Jacob's Sir way of writing quite similar.... and I am a big fan of his writing....coming to this poem... it has been penned down quite well....and I am impressed by the author's note.... you know what you want to convey and your presentation is quite brilliant in this regard....very very good work...another poem which will go to my library.....

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you so much for respecting my opinions Anurag.And Jacob is really very brilliant writer.I am humbled. i am no match to him. He inspires me.

[SuspectGray]

A poem of hopeless collisions between tradition and freedom. I am always amazed when I read of the plight of women in your and other countries.

[Wee]

Deep. One voice is all it takes to make awareness a tradition for mankind

[Sameer]

Very strong emotions and striking use of words which picture this world and rip it off from its ohh so wounderful self. Great penning

[Mai L Nissen]

This is really well executed, Sophy. An important topic that certainly deserves attention, and you certainly got mine. From beginning to end you manage to conjure graphic images of violence, vile deeds! Yet despite my nausea and disgust, I am impressed with your ability to express these violent deeds with such elegance. Very melancholic piece!

[Warren Daniel II]

I'm sorry about the female genocide in your country and I'm glad your voicing your thoughts. I really enjoyed the message behind the poem these lines " Intake stalled,cut the cord..
Arms mauled,chop me off!!
Unsung cry,fills brooding sky.
Ohhh!! Traditions so high!" We beautifully written.

[Warren Daniel II]

I'm sorry about the female genocide in your country and I'm glad your voicing your thoughts. I really enjoyed the message behind the poem these lines " Intake stalled,cut the cord..
Arms mauled,chop me off!!
Unsung cry,fills brooding sky.
Ohhh!! Traditions so high!" We beautifully written.

[Sophy Freebirds]

thank you for your kind words :)

[J. K. Beach]

Sophy... My daughter is my precious jewel... I have never understood the preoccupation of many cultures (not just your own) with raising boy children above the girl children... to the point where female circumcision, kidnapping from young girls from schools to be sold as wives, and yes, even genocide are allowed, even condoned! I applaud your righteous wrath and your beautiful words about so horrible a subject. Thank you for speaking for the dead!

[Sophy Freebirds]

:-) thank you so much for your appreciation J.K.

[R Smith]

thank you for highlighting this horror Sophy, your words should be written as headlines in your country, its to my shame that i was unaware of such a gross travesty, may the souls of the dead find everlasting peace, my love and best wishes to you and all those who suffer because of this crime :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you so much for your suppotive words Richard :)

[Chris D.]

I pray your words turn to parachutes in your dreams, and carries your pain away.. Thanks for sharing your heart and for allowing us to be a part of the magic that is you.. Stay strong, because I have a feeling your talents help many.. Hugs!!