Thirst

Be a good little puppy....

You cradle my cheek in your hand, a smile on your face

lips reveal delicately curved canines,

you look thirsty.

You look so much like him... I breathe

StupidstupidstupidstupidDON'TFUCKINGMENTIONHIMEVEREVEREVER

you move in closer,

the yellow of your eyes flickers

you are angry

angry with me.

Like who?

I know it's a trick

I know what you'll do if I say his name

So I bite my lip,

but not answering

it's worse than saying his name

"Him."

he had me before you and you hate that.

 

Your hands tighten around my wrists

your hips push against me,

your eyes, yellowgoldbeautiful

ask me to say his name

I look away, the one movement I have the strength for.

 

Your lips, tremblingangryfurious

press to my ear

wicked lovely voice

WHO.

shaking, I don't know why I don't answer.

 

You pull my head to the side,

baring my neck to you

so scarred, broken

teeth marks and imprints left by you

Master.

You smirk as you lean in

pressing your lips to the latest gash, the latest scar

you bite the scab away

lap up blood with your tongue

I whimper

you smirk more,

one hand on the back of my neck, the other fixes my hair

you bite down

hard.

 

ChriststopitstopitstopitI'llsayhisnamepromisepromisejustSTOPGODSTOPIT.

 

Who?

you drip blood onto my lips

I know the answer, even his name won't satisfy you

No one.

you lick my neck, cleaning it

you aren't thristy anymore.

Good puppy. Good little puppy.

 

 

Author's Note

I don't know, I used to have a thing for writing poems about Vampires, really fucked up ones, too. I tried to get the fear in here, I just finished reading a book about a girl that was abducted when she was younger and beaten and raped over a five year span and....I guess that got me thinking about the sicko-psycho Vamps in my head again.

What do you think? I know it's missing something, and I'm going to edit it later, probably, since it's....Two thirty in the morning and I'm tired.

Reviews

[Voice11]

scary

[Flo_writer]

You got the fear in there well enough. I didn't read this as a vampire poem until somewhere in the middle so it was surprising as well. And as I got to the end I realize it was suspenseful as I was eager to know what his name was.

[Lexi Nicole]

I think it's perfect. Dark and suspenseful. You've outdone yourself with this one!

-Howl

[Winter Poison]

Oooh, very nice :D The creepy factor was way in here XD

[Georgia Gypsy]

I really like it...i still have goose-bumps from the dark imagry! I feel a little breathless with the fear and excitement. It's like a bad story you just can't help but want to read again, because you know it scares the hell out of you, but you like the feeling anyway.
I like it just the way it is. You might be able to add to it, but it conveys everything that i think you were going for.
I thought my head was fkd up...LOL...your writing has me beat! Love it.