~It's About Me This Time.~

A poem about myself.

- I'm only sixteen I feel a hundred years old.-

I keep going back to that tonight

I keep hearing a voice in my head

I keep thinking there has to be an end in sight

and I'm too stupid to let the dead be dead.

-I kept everything inside and even though I tried it all fell apart.-

There's a rusty old key I've got chaining my secrets up tight-----

-I ^ke_ep goⁱng ba_ck to ^that _tonight-

no one should hear them

not ever again

no one should hear them

not pain from way back then.

-I know I may have lost my way but all paths lead straight to you-

It's hard to stick to the road when you're blind

when all you see is t_wi^st_in^g bending darkness

how can I see the road if I'm blind?

-I know you're still there-

laughter, laughter~ In the air

your scent dances~dances

it's everywhere.

-I can feel you pull me down-

Senseless thoughtless you act on need alone

darker stranger and into the unknown

struggling lost fearful and ~ pain

-I know who you really are/ you're the one that cries when you're alone.-

You're right.

When I feel my heart collapse

and my lungs shudder in disbelief

and I feel this unbearable grief

and I think ~ How could I be so stupid?~

I sit down and cry

because the old me would never be so shy,

she wouldn't sit and beg and ask the heavens why

She would stand up and get together and....

there's no point in trying anymore.

-HELP ME. HELP ME LET GO.-

Just pry my hands from these memories

let them flutter away in the breeze

they're crumbling and dirty like ugly fall leaves

God, help me let go of these f*****g memories.

~That's not the way I want my story to end.~

 

Author's Note

That first line with the dashy- things on the ends of it (these ----) kept popping into my head. It's from Bon Jovi's "Someday I'll be Saturday Night". I love that song <3 So, I decided it applied to how I'm feeling so well right now that I should use it and apply it to a poem. (After that line the other lines with the dashes are from songs, except "I keep going back to that tonight") other artists used- (because I'm tired) Linkin Park, next 4 are Evanescence, then the last two (includes the ending one) are P!nk. I'm too lazy to list songs xD Just let me know what you think, mmkay?
:)

Reviews

[Bud]

Song and poem are of the same kindred. So, it's only appropriate if you use the ---- in your works, as they do in some music translations of lyrics. This is a great self help/healing piece. It shows you are acknowledging your various emotions, and are facing them head on with answers. Should you not have an answer, you are in constant search for one until it is found. You know, the first lines of this brought to my mind the rule of age. Who knows what anyone's real age is? We only measure the physical body age, and that can be inaccurate. Your mind can easily be eons more advanced or even the opposite of what the body is. And the body can be older than the years it has been here, for that matter. But that is in a rare class of diseases, in that situation. But possible. Our lives, the experiences we have, and how we react to all of it is what determines our age within our thoughts. And that dictates to our bodies, just as our bodies dictate to our mind how old we feel. With that portion of the poem alone, not to mention the rest of your Wonderfully Delightful piece you have left a lot to ponder on, as it provokes many thoughts. Another Most Excellent work of art, Aveira! Keep on being you! The night sky would be a dimmer sky, should you decide to drop your pen!

[deeps]

Whoa! This is amazing! I really liked this
Such wonderful powerful emotions here.
Great out pour of words. Well expressed.

[Georgia Gypsy]

Very good intropective self portrait of how your life has been molded through one night, or many through your life....using lines from songs can help harness what you are trying to convey or they hold special meaning to you either way they are a great tool, and i say go with it.
it works, that is the most important thing to remember!.

I love it....wish i could find something more constructive to say....
great job, keep up the great work!...