Creature

I don't really know what you are

physically, you are terrifying

horrendous and disguisting

You have such pale pasty skin,

milk white even in utter darkness

covered in that thin film of sweat

it hangs over your bones like wet towels

too weighted down to shift on its own,

bending only at liquifying muscle's command.

Your arms drag down your legs, past your knees

sharp claws covered by that same, disgraceful skin

No fingers, nothing to create with

only claws and sharp things to kill.

Your long toes and feet drag the floor as you lurch

you move, you run, you writhe and shiver

Creature, something created out of what,

I'll never know.

Your smoothly rounded head and sharp jutting chin

a mouth full of razor gleaming teeth, white and pure

surrounded by lips so cracked

and a voice, a shriek, so captivating and alarming

when heard, I run.

But I find you (or perhaps it's you that finds me) later

always

and you stand there at first, nearly seven feet tall

arms hanging limply, skin clutching desperately to bone

and I beg you to leave. I beg you to leave.

But do you?

No.

Not until I realize that I am, in fact

staring straight into a dulled mirror.

Author's Note

Okay, I can explain this but I can't do it without sounding utterly insane....Then again, I think all writers are a little insane. ;)
Basically, I had this sudden, vivid daydream a couple of hours ago of this thing that I described in here, this creature, clawing at my back door. I pushed it away, went back to work, and later it came back. This time, the "daydream" was this Creature throwing itself through a window and tackling me to the ground. I fought a losing battle, really, but either way the little vision left and I, again, went back to work. Going upstairs to take a shower my Creature came back and this time it was trying to drag me back down the stairs. Now, I was just about to start writing this when another vision filled my head, while I was listening to music. A girl screaming her heart out, shaking, convulsing, turns into this Creature, then morphs back into herself. It was only then that I realized the girl looked strikingly similar to yours truly. So.... Thus the ending was born. :D
I really like this piece, what do you guys think?

Reviews

[hershey's kiss]

I.... loved it!! as always :D
I think you could have put in some of the aspects of your other visions, too, not just that the creature turns out to be you. like, you could have added the creature dragging you down the stairs, and I really like the last vision you had of the girl shrieking and changing into the creature.
still, though, AWESOME write :]]

- hershey's kiss

[Bud]

Insanity encompasses us all. Sanity is the abnormal. What is sane to one, is insane to another. This is a Magnificent piece of creation, here. The ending was Brilliant! Keep it up!

[deeps]

Quite the chilling write here, I like it I thought it was very well written.
Wonderful detail and imagery as well!

[Holly]

Wow, I don't like this but only because I'm really getting this nice graphic visual and it's freaking me out! Ha ha good job, very chilling.

[Ich bin das Giftmä..]

Hahahaha I embrace my insanity, so I can totally understand where you are coming from on this. The creature sounds disgusting and almost reminds me of this nightmare I had about a scraggly cat that was emaciated had one huge eye and one small.
Great job on this piece