A Lesson

 

I don’t quite know just what to say

When oft you ask me so-

“Why do you sit on dewy ground

And watch the flowers grow?”

 

“Well sit and see I say to thee

And peace you’ll surely know-

But I don’t think you’ll sit with me

To watch the day’s wind blow.”

 

“Why, O why? Tis wrongly so!

Even a fool can see!

It’s not only you, but myself too

That can rest below the tree!”

 

“Of course, of course, sit some you may,

But peace you’ll never know-

For one must stop and stay a while

To truly sit below.”

 

“Why, O why? You have me wrong!

For great spans I can stay!

I’ll sit all day, and sit all night

As long as clouds aren’t grey!”

 

“Ah yes, but that your problem be!

The weather is the key!

You cannot sit in the sunshine

And with the storm agree!

 

It’s the fury of the tempests

And rains that never cease

That bring the flowers bright with life

And fill the soul with peace.”

Reviews

[Dezaraye]

This is absolutely beautiful! I love everything about this. It reads like a classic piece and I love how you've crafted this so eloquently. It is such a beautiful lesson to learn - there is such beauty around us and few take the time to truly see it.

[Gypsy Willow]

I love this one Doug! I love the rhythm! This piece has a lot of personality. Bravo!

[Brendan Moulton]

The dialogue kind of reminds me of Shakespeare. Very good!

[Lucy Kennedy]

I liked the imagery and the alice in wonderland type rhyming aura. It seemed there were two people speaking here, can I ask who or if I'm right? lol.

[Clarisse Nanoit]

AMAZING, AMAZING, AMAZING! I love this piece, because it's so nostalgic, yet so fresh. ASTOUNDING work... Unbelieveable how great this is.
KH

[M J Moore]

I think this would be my favorite piece from you. Not everyone can write this way...using the old tongue and make it work, make it work so well. It's like a nursery rhyme, only revamped. And a lesson I quite agree with. No one can understand why I love the beach at night, why I seldom get in the water but enjoy it even more so than they do. Excellent piece.

mj

[V. K. Harris]

Bravo, Excellent write.

[Arly Parent]

this is very nice
moves really well
and the use of that style of languge and speech is right on
hard to do but you pulled it off
very nice
glad you're back

[julian3]

This piece evokes a dream-like state, as if the reader has slowly drifted down, like a petal, to rest on the earth in Alice's Wonderland. It is very nice and the pattern and format add to the enjoyment.
And after reading it twice, I did have to concentrate to keep a song from repeating though my mind - "I'm Only Happy When It Rains"... if you remember that one!

[Spoken]

nature is a beautiful miracle and too often do does it go by unnoticed. Awsome lesson we all should learn! Great piece

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

Oh this is really great. I loved it. Thank you so much for sharing it with me. You should check out some of my poems because some of them have a similar feeling.
Love All, Mejasha