The Flame

The Flame

A Poem by Doug

 

O how I miss the bliss

Love’s sweet and gentle kiss-

Some things I cannot understand

I only wish to hold your hand-

 

Time lost, but never gained

If only you knew how I pained-

Not the same, never the same

All too like the roaring flame-

 

If only, if only

I were not so lonely-

If only, if only

You would not dismiss-

© 2008 Doug


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O!
I never understood when ppl talked about an ex saying someone was an 'old flame'..........and now i get it......after all these years!!!..........

Thank you!!!

The poem is lovely........and i especially like how u end it at 'dismiss'-
i think that brings to the reader a lot of emotion....well it did to me.....coz i felt that 'dismiss' in the pit of my tummy!!.......

loving, longing.......gone!! *sigh*

xxxxx
O!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You know I would have ended this with the word

Me.

On a seperate line... but then I always was a drama queen. A poignant poem that suits the rhyme well... Congrats.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was a sad tragic poem. All I want is love, yet you dismiss me. The idea is perfect and the execution is flawles..

XXOXX

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love the description..i believe it was inspired by my poem??lol

ok.. i love this piece..the longing for love's "sweet and gentle kiss"
very reminiscent

u managed to amaze me yet again

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Flame is exactly the right analogy for love; bright, warm, short-lived, and oh how it burns when it is misused. Excellent work.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I felt a true heart in this piece. I love it when I can feel what the writer is actually feeling.

This is a very impressive piece. The way you captured a rawness to your emotion but making it passionately pleasing.

Wonderful write!!!

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Such sweet sorrow... to yearn for love and to find it unrequited, a tragedy that not even the stars should bear witness to.

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

To know and explore the flame of love...

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

I remember when you first wrote this... Funny how things end up...

Posted 16 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

0-0 I loved the line "Time lost, but never gained, If only you knew how i pained-" I love poems that ryhme, you did a very good job here. Thank you for writing this poem~^-^

Posted 16 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.


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