Impassioned vigils of war

Left in cold solid exsistance with cuts on my cheek

war has only begun

they have fitted their arrow to their string

if only I had the simpler role.

But I am the long blade that shines in the sun.

Im the sword swung at the enemy

leaving his body petrified by fatal wounds

He lays there bleeding

as my noble men and my knights and my fighters hit and swing

this is no battle; this is war.

I am the sword that makes sweet chime music when withdraw from its sheath

I lost many of my men

My armor clings together my red hair flows down my waist

My horse, more alive than he ever been, and my compainon...

With his moon eyes set on me, ready to fight and die by my side

he clentched his sword and swung a man, and another, I saw him twist and fight

~

 I stood from the ground fighting my enemy , coughing blood as i took a hit way to many times

A man that looked like him,..my compainon.

Tears welded my eyes as everything began to fade in and out.

My vision blured as I see the my best friend fighting for dear life, screaming my name.

 I whispered " He's the living amongest the dead" I watched him fight and i took my sword and got up. My blue sea eyes turned blood voilet as my body burned like fire.

Ive been peirced by my enemy's dagger but my enemy got sliced by my sword. His body in half , pool of blood.

~

My bestfriend, my companion came next to me sword in hand and looked into my eyes

we saw our kingdom fall apart

we were two of the few surviours

~

Blood and many dead men,

our friends, our alys , our knights...dead.

Fire took its place just as the storm above us did.

 

Told you this is war.

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Hello readers, as for this story I came to a dead end, I was going to make it very brutaly sad after all not everything turns out to be happily ever after.
So is there anything i should change or add?
I am eventualy gonna do a remake of the story only with a twist.
Hope you enjoyed =)

Reviews

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Very good, I really enjoyed reading this out loud, it has a certain feeling which reminds me somewhat to longing and desperation. Very well described, the only flaw I noticed, is that some words are mispelled, like "voilet" instead of "violet" or "alys" intead of "allies", yet, grammar is not really important if one can read and understand it perfectly. Trully a marvelous writing, keep up the good work.

[Iota]

Well I thought this was a poem it is formatted like one. However a poem or story makes no difference. This was actually pretty good to me, It showed the true nature of war and the nature of those who fight it and accept that death is always knocking at there door. Ah in this one everything was lost the kingdom the king the men so maybe this war was at too great of a cost. I did enjoy this read very nice job.