Offering

Don't.  Don't give me your heart-
or that look.  The one that softens
your eyes.  I, I just can't.
Don't wait for me - like an acolyte
at the altar.
I will hurt you!
I cannot accept your offering.
Put your still,
whole,
safe,
beating heart back,
back where it belongs.
I don't want this.  I won't be able to
bear it.  The pain that will
Make your eyes go from soft..
To steel.
But, I can't stop it,
I can't control it.  I will walk away
because you give me
no.
choice.
Your hearts blood on my soul.
Because you, you offered too much.
And I,
I am the wrong Goddess.

Reviews

[Tommy]

Fore I fear the heart would scorn, but would not break. I wish she would have told me this before I gave her my heart.

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy

[Emily B]

you said the words I couldn't say

and for that I will be eternally grateful

[Lilly Negoi]

how much strength is required for one to be able to say:
"Put your still,
whole,
safe,
beating heart back,
back where it belongs."
?
it's a beautiful poem, carrying such a painful honesty! 100/100 from my point of view, and in my faves!

[Forest Green]

Tenderness turned inside out. You've describe the severed feelings quite well of commitment unfulfilled.

[Angelheaded Hipster]

Oh s**t! Dude, this, this is awesome. Ive been there, youve been there, obviously, and doesnt that just suck? When someone loves you and you know they'd do anything for you, but you can't accept it, because of whatever reasons...mine was cause I didn't feel as strongly, and I didn't want to wreck the guy anymore than I had...
This is amazing...and you doubt your skills...please!

[.]

. wow ... you're a liberated poet and it's very inspiring to read a liberated poet ... the way you give pre eminence to expressing the intensity of emotion and let the line breaks almost recite your poem for the reader is amazing ... and the last line ... oh, the last line just consumes ... you said so much with just those two words ... "wrong Goddess" ... unforgettable ...