It Dances!

It Dances!

A Story by Spoon
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We build machines to kill. But have we gone too far?

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“How could this have happened? Oh god, the ramifications!” the doctor muttered, a hand on his forehead as he paced behind the glass screen. With every moment that passed dark patches reached outwards from his armpits, as if fear itself was seeping from him. The only sound other than his breathing and footsteps was the constant shuffling of loose paper in the hands of Professor Humphrey. He, too, was possessed by the fear his superior felt.


“It - it - it’s impossible, sir, just - just impossible. I mean, ye - yesterday it was just - just -,”


“I know! I know!” the doctor shouted, agitation dripping from every pore. He ceased his pacing and stared through the screen. “It’s not supposed to happen. It’s just - not.”


Humphrey, who’s fear had now extended to the damage his damp palms were causing his papers, clasped his hair and exhaled slowly. He tried to wipe his hands on his jacket, but he only succeeded in covering them with fibres.


                “How are we going to explain this?” the doctor muttered. “The machine was meant to kill, not dance!”

© 2013 Spoon


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Some ideas:
'Mad Scientist's Worst Nightmare',
'Machines Gone Wild',
'Machines, Disasters and other Mad Scientist Nightmares',
'Worst Case Scenario',
'Disaster Tango and The Machine'




Posted 10 Years Ago


Spoon

10 Years Ago

I like worst case scenario! Thank you, I may change that.
C Mack Lewis

10 Years Ago

It's yours. Great story! I laughed out loud - it was delightful and it's so hard to find things in t.. read more
I love it! But why are you giving away the punchline in the title? I will admit the title made me want to read it but why not be a bit more sly with the title?

Posted 10 Years Ago


Spoon

10 Years Ago

Thank you! I have considered changing it, but I can't think of anything catchy enough to replace it... read more
XD Okay, this was funny. I was reading this and thought something bad had happened, and then I read that last part, and laughed. This is just awesome. Great job. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Spoon

10 Years Ago

Thank you! :D
Dark Rider

10 Years Ago

I need more funny stuff like that
:)
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I find the last line a funny non sequitur, as I really can't make a reasonable link between a machine designed for killing to end up dancing. It lampoons the blockbuster movie "tight close-up on nervous faces" trope very artfully.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Spoon

10 Years Ago

Why, thank you! Exactly what was going for.
Loved it! The twist at the end actually made me laugh out loud.
When I read this, the first line actually inspired me to write "9 months", so I'll have to thank you for that. ;)

Thank you.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Spoon

10 Years Ago

Thanks for these comments, I'm glad I could help you! I started this a s a longer piece and never go.. read more

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Added on April 5, 2013
Last Updated on May 13, 2013
Tags: flash fiction, fiction, short, very short, robot, dance, kill, sci fi, science fiction, doctor, disaster
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Melbourne, Victoria, Australia



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