Those were the flowers

I decided to use a random subject generator and romance came up. Here was my attempt.

Those were the flowers

That was the tree

Where we knelt down for hours 

And he asked to marry me

We were to be married

Just a few months time

So homeward I was carried

As we did we’d hum and chime

The sun broke for morning

Cutting through the room

But it was a warning

The army called in full bloom

They needed men for war

And they paraded them out

Flags high and hung on each door

Like the first day as a scout

He mouthed he'd be home

He gave me a final look

When they come back from where they roam

I’d be right here, however long it took

I started up our business

Jams and fruits and sweets 

I worked through the sadness

Lying alone beneath the sheets

They said I was naïve

That he wouldn't return

I said that I believe

Month after month I would yearn

I got a little message

Saying he was taken 

Under the captain Lesage

Now I was alone and shaken. 

I went to those daisies 

I went to that oak tree

Night and day as the world became hazy

As I cried, emotions running free

Weeks gone by, I felt a hand on my shoulder

It was warm and rough

My head turned to see him slightly older

But it didn't matter, it was him sure enough

We could finally say our oaths at rest

Stood hand in hand

Me in my dress, him in his best

We both felt fuzzy and wonderfully grand

But as I walked out the church

My ring on my finger

I fell, I felt my husband lurch

People didn't linger

Now I lay forever

Up beneath the trees

My husband never leaves, whatsoever

He sings and sleeps beneath in the breeze

I waited so long

I didn't realise

I thought I was strong

But I know it was lies 

Next to the flowers

Under the tree

Where we knelt down for hours 

And he asked to marry me

Reviews

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

The way you told this story is excellent. Awesome write.

[Quinn]

Thank you very much x

[Sami Khalil]

"The sun broke for morning
Cutting through the room
But it was a warning
The army called in full bloom"

A nice poem. I like those lines the most...:).......................

[Quinn]

Thank you very much.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).................

[Bhumika Devkota]

Nice poem, it expresses a lot of feelings.

[Quinn]

Thank you x

[vaishnavi]

wow what a poem
really it expresses ur feelings very well :D

[Quinn]

Thank you very much, I'm glad you like it.

[vaishnavi]

your welcome :D

[Mirra]

Sweet and a very nice love story. I remember a movie when I read this one. Well penned!

[Quinn]

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. What movie did it remind you of?

[Mirra]

It is a Filipino movie entitled Baler and another Bollywood movie but couldn't remember the title :-)

[Quinn]

Fair enough, thank you anyway.

[Mirra]

You're welcome :-)

[Ramona Hughes]

What a beautiful poem. The emotions are raw and well spoken. You have crafted a poignant tale of love here. The cadence makes it an easy and pleasurable read. Well done.

Ramona Hughes

[Quinn]

Thank you very much.