If you were a spirit

I tried to do a free verse with this. Let me know what you think

If you were a spirit,

What would you do?

Would you fly around?

Would you try to shout,

"I am not gone, my love, just look at me!"

But she would not answer,

For you are gone.

A mere one of billions

Of spirits wandering this world.

You may search for answers,

But none shall be found.

You might long for life,

But it shall not be granted.

For you are a spirit.

No one can hear you,

Except the dead.

Reviews

[Bear]

The afterlife is such a broad topic that it is always good to write about. Religious, philosophical, existential, hypothetical, metaphysical they each have a view of life after death and reincarnation. And you are right, none of them have found answers in the search for prolonging life or how to communicate with the dead. Very perceptive of you, well done.

[Ellay]

Thank you :)

[Elodie Thompson]

No worries, I really liked the idea.

[Daughter of Darkness]

I love it! Absolutely perfect!

[Ellay]

Thank you :D

[Elodie Thompson]

It has a different perspective and a different approach that allows readers to think about the topic in a vivid manner. The simplistic language ties up the whole theme together, so very well done.

[Ellay]

Thank you :)

[Elodie Thompson]

No worries, I really liked the idea and I put it in the wrong box earlier. My apologies for that error.

[Ellay]

It's okay, we all make mistakes :)

[Gee]

If I were a spirit I would be the finest cognac,to be enjoyed and live on in others....like this Pepitro,makes you think

[Ellay]

Thank you :)

[....................]

A thought-provoking question....I would do what i spend most of my time doing now, perhaps: observing the world around me...I like your take on this...

[Ellay]

Thank you :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

That would be creeeeeeeeeeeeeepy...lol. Nice job with this one. If i was a spirit...hmmm... I think i'd be just hangin around people, messin around with them, moving objects...ya know, scaring em a little, then i'd leave. Lol. But to get serious, very well done :)

[Ellay]

Thank you :D I would probably mess with people too XD

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Lol :) you are welcome :)

[Captain Rilen]

A sad sentiment, I quite liked it. The inability to reach out would be heart wrenching.

[Ellay]

Thank you for the review :)