A Untitled Love Poem

On this fall day

I would like to go Snow Patrol with you my dear

 

We can go lay in the wet grass

Chase Cars

Stare at stars under a comforting silence

While our warming stares

Thaw the frozen hearts of lost lovers

On park benches

 

Lady

Let me be your every color

So

When your blue

I will be your bright

Let me take your hands and we can dance

To 18 century Romantic era songs

 

You and me

Two regular beatles 

Letting It Be

 
Dancing away

Pretening there arn't any problems in the world

 

And our love...

 

Our love can grow on each other like vines

 

And we...

 

And we can make snow angles in piles of orange-hippie colored leaves,

Than wake up with wide smiles like its christmas.

 

My lady you...

 

You are a dream

That comes from a need

Of a want

Of a desire that I must have

And yes

I am flippin ape-s**t over you

 

Somedays I am staring at powerlines

Counting Crows

Waiting for Miss Jones to come home

 

How bout we be one

Enter loves course

Moan at the moon

You wake up next to me,

And I will wake up next to you

 

 

Reviews

[Chaos]

Ah yes, I love this piece. I love your twist of typical phrases. I felt like guitars should be strumming a low monatone pitch in a slow jaz rhythm. I love the passion splashed between each 'orange' and 'let it be' lines. Wonderful write and I enjoyed the creativity. Great job!

Welcome to my page.

[Girlintheworld]

I like the thought of "orange-hippie colored leaves". Great poem! Also like, "and our love can grow on eachother like vines"

[poet2angels (lynda)]

I like this alot...It has a beautiful flow...
It is unique and cerianly not cliche' lol
awesome

Lynda

[Michael Carr]

yeah b***h b***h b***h, oh he's not the greatest poet of the 21st century, wah wah wah. (we are only barely a decade in) its a fun, sweet and unique piece. a style that pops and nice rhythm.
well mr. best poet of the 21st century, u have just met the greatest story writer of the 21st century.
au shantae, or however its spelled.

[Emel Kay]

Steve, it would seem no-one gets your sense of humor anymore. Tough luck. The internet is a harsh prostitute. Anyway, I get the sense this was a play around piece, just to work out the muscles. A cleverness here and there. I'm glad you still exist.

[Faeshifter]

What I expect really from someone proclaiming themselves to be the 'best writer of the 21st century'. Which is not a lot. Misspelled and a little lame; I might be more sympathetic if you had a different tag line.

[[untitled]]

its ok....but not the best...lol
How about something different no one has done?
Why should it always center on love and the need oh i must not be without you sort of bullshit...lol
How about something new and refeshing....people criticize some of my stuff but it is different and does nto center around adolescent notions of love..lol
Ah well! To each their own....twinkie anyone? lmao

[Kicker of Elves]

Looks like you know how to win someone over.
It's cute and fun.
"We can go lay in the wet grass
Chase Cars
Stare at stars under a comforting silence
While our warming stares
Thaw the frozen hearts of lost lovers
On park benches"
This was by far my favorite stanza, but it kind of slows down from there.
Love is one thing that we all have in common and can enjoy!

Haley Michelle (In tennis, love means nothing)

[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

Sweet and no offense, but you are not the best poet of the 21- century. Nevertheless, this was quite good, and you have a unique style. I can feel the playful love scheme going on here, and you did a good job at getting your message through. There are some points in it where the flow was messed up, but it's no big deal. All in all, it's pretty great! keep it real!

peace,

~may

[Collette]

ugh, I am in love with this. seriously. nice change of pace, mr. spade. I dig it when you switch it up. Must be a lucky lady...