Unrequited love

You’ll always be my flower
I would never be your bee.

Reviews

[pia]

This was so short yet touching
A person who values and cherishes his loved one so much...that despite everything,that loved one never chooses him. Its sad and it happens ro many....they give all they have to someone they love and care for ...but at the cost of those who don't value them back....
I do suggest you re write the second line...make it more effective.. replace "would" with "will"
Itll give a more last and longer effect o the poets trouble
You're a good writer !!! Keep writing

[Suhd]

AH! Thanks a ton Pia for the compliment and for this really nice and detailed review. Your suggestion is duly noted :)

[Zoya]

Aw...sad, isn't it. There's much beauty hidden inside though. Simple yet deep. Nice work.

[Suhd]

Thanks much Zoe for stopping by !

[Zoya]

No worries

[Donicca Dona L]

Ahh short but full with emotion.
one question is supposed to be ''would'' or ''will'' since it got me a bit confused.
in case it is a ''will' it gives a more sad tone.
in case it is like I read it '' would'' I think it's pure love...

beautiful , beautiful , beautiful.

[Suhd]

Appreciate the kind words Donicca!
It's the way you read it.

[Wajiha Nayeem]

that's one of a kind,beautiful

[Suhd]

Thank you !

[Wajiha Nayeem]

my pleasure!

[Drowning In Reality]

Interesting and thought provoking.

[Suhd]

Thank you !

[Stacy Purvis]

Short, passionate, sad, and to the point. Thank you for sharing, dear.

[Suhd]

You're most welcome!

[Diamond]

Wow!! what a beautiful expression. Unrequited, however unconditional also. Enjoyed the visit.

[Suhd]

Thank you so much :)

[EcstaticEuphoria]

So tiny and yet so powerful. I think I'm mostly impressed that you got the point across in so few words and yet left us pandering. Great job!

[Suhd]

Thanks for your kind words ! means a lot.

[Najam Us Saher]

I have loved you,
Only if you could see.... ( my continuation after reading your poem)
Just wrote it simply after reading your poem. It was really good and to the point. Twas was short but said a lot. I liked it.

[Suhd]

Thank you very much. Your lines are awesome !!!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much and you are welcome ☺
I could write them only after reading your thoughtful lines.