An Errand to live for

An Errand to live for

A Poem by Suhd
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The season of love and heartache

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With her loaded pouch strolled spring
Through country lanes and fields fancying
the scenery of yesteryears while chewing
on basil mint that made her breath, 
the wreath of garlands adorned her ronze hair
And her eyes kept all April to themselves.
She stopped by the pond and beheld in it
Multitudes of forms of life, easy on the eye.
Later sitting upon the grassland wearing white
Cotton over-blouse, now soggy, 
her brow twinkled. She removed from her hair
The jasmine stale and tossed it down gently
Then far she gazed into the empty space
Into the cluster of aspens until mirthless
Became every twig, Until Autumn began to fiddle. 
 


© 2017 Suhd



Author's Note

Suhd
All I wanted to do was to simply depict and experiment on the sudden change in mood. Your comments and thoughts on this :)

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The mood changes are part of life. We all have mood swings. But this brought out that concept very well. Nice job. It's a simple but clear poem.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Ah!
the words here were so elegant...
i mean when i was reading this poem...i was speechless....great work duh!
keep writing.

Posted 4 Months Ago


I love your descriptions of everything, it does paint a picture until 'Until autumn began to fiddle" I see you're trying to paint it happening but I might not much of a poet, the only expirience in that field was some cliche raps at school

Posted 4 Months Ago


Celt of the Redland Realm

4 Months Ago

'I'm not much of a poet" but I appreciate you giving me a read :D is what I meant to say
Suhd

4 Months Ago

Ah thank you so much, poetry is painting with words, so :) hahaha yeah sure I'll give your work a re.. read more
Nice! Clean, short and very sweet!


Posted 8 Months Ago


Dig the title. Breathless style..soft springlike. Roots of clean and real poetry. AUTHENTIC write. When I'm left thinking about it it's a good one man.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Suhd

8 Months Ago

Thanks much dude !
LostBoy

8 Months Ago

Anytime bro!
This is my favorite theme.. Writing about seasons and the change they bring. I never tire reading about them.

Thats mainly because each writer is so unique how he expresses his perspective. You my friend did amazing job in conveying your view. And the personification brings out more of the beauty though it is about heartache. Very well written.

Above you mean 'bronze hair' right?

Posted 8 Months Ago


Suhd

8 Months Ago

Appreciate the kindness Krutika :) It's ronze. It suited with the theme.
Such a beautiful piece. Humanizing the seasons, giving them life, breath. Something we so often overlook or ignore in our hast. Thanks for bringing in into such light and beauty!

Posted 8 Months Ago


Suhd

8 Months Ago

Thank you Rosalee :)
Aromatic, romantic and a truly pleasant read.
Smooth in transition and Flow.
Tender heart. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Suhd

8 Months Ago

Thank you Anastasia...!
Anastasia Purvis

8 Months Ago

You are most welcome. x
Oh...such elegance; soft and calming. I felt like I was the one in your poem. It was nice to be able to "feel" the scene as I read.
It's a really beautiful piece with great imaginary. Loved it :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tina H.W.

8 Months Ago

It's my pleasure :)
Bodine

8 Months Ago

Great poem! There's not much about it I'd change.
... i don't know whether you're open to co.. read more
Suhd

8 Months Ago

Thanks much. I'm open to critique so feel free.
I really like this. You accomplished your goal and then some. Stunning structure and graceful style. Bravo

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Suhd

8 Months Ago

Thanks much!

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Tags: nature, beauty, sad, spring, autumn, transformation, scenery

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Abbottabad, Pakistan



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