guhh just guhh needs DE-cheesing lol

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line breaks will help.

She thinks she's so amazing
She thinks she's so damn fine
She thinks she cant be noticed taking everything thats mine
But then again is this all my fault?
Do i bring it on my self?
Im so confused.

(maybe switch this up a bit...Just a suggestion)
How can she be,
better than me?
is she better then me?
No, she can't be.
Then why is she in my shoes?

We used to be inseprible (inseparable)
we used to have a laugh
we thought we would be friends forever
but friendships rairly last.
Im so confused.

How can she be,
better than me?
is she better then me?
No, she can't be.
Then why is she in my shoes?
is she better then me?

i found myself trying to be her
im not sure who i am
She is better then me
how can she be?
She's better then me
No she cant be
is she better then me?
She's better then me
how can she be?
She's better then me
No she cant be (too much repitition here. I suggest shortening it.)
is she better then me?
She's better then me
how can she be?
She's better then me
No she cant be
is she better then me?
What no she cant be
she IS better then me

Im so confused.
Why's she in my shoes?







Anyways, this has potential. I am not anything great, but I added my two cents for what it's worth.

Posted 7 Months Ago