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A Poem by Suicidal Teddybear
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yeah if anyone can help figure out where im going with this i will love them lol ohhh and i'll say it now i pretty much ripped a line from twilight :D xx
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Sick and tired of being over looked

Why is it never me

Why does no one see

i just want someone to be hooked

 

the ones that pay me any attention

well thets no go there

 

In another life in another world

am i yours

do you look at me and not her

 

What is it about you that draws me in

your scent, your smile, your kindness

everything about you

im intoxicated by your very pressance

 

How long till i have you

or maybe someone close would do

 

I ask you are you happy you say yes

it kills me inside to hear you say this

I''ll wait forever if i have to

even if i die before i get you


© 2009 Suicidal Teddybear



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This is good though it doesn't seem to flow very well and you have most your I in lower case but again a quick clean-up will sort out all the errors. I have a feeling you are writing your poems quickly then posting them maybe if you spend longer checking over you can erase the silly mistakes and make it a better piece of work. It is good though just needs polish.

Posted 7 Months Ago

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