What can you see?

What can you see?

A Poem by Surabhi Kaushik
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"Mirrors don't tell lies" they say. I wonder if you can see more of me than where your eyes travel? I wonder how much of me you can see in the mirror and otherwise.

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Can you see my heart
 full of love and my arms growing restless,
waiting to embrace the one I love the most?
Can you see my eyes oozing with envy
for someone who’s better than me?
Can you see the sadness in my smile
and the hope in my dreams?
If the face is the mirror of my mind,
I wonder if you can read my thoughts?


© 2017 Surabhi Kaushik



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Hi Surabhi,

A couple of suggestions.

Please add a space between each 'Can's

Why not rephrase the last line as,

"If the face is the mirror of my mind,
I wonder what it is that you can see?"

I feel this would be a better sign-off.

Also I wonder how anyone would be able to see 'hope in your dreams' ... just wondering,.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Surabhi Kaushik

8 Months Ago

Thanks so much for your suggestions Ashan. I truly appreciate it.
I did not understand what .. read more



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We should probably build a new and better version of the mirror in the future to really tell people if they're beautiful or not...;))
this is a nice poem...good and innovative! :))


Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Surabhi Kaushik

8 Months Ago

Thanks so much
Hi Surabhi,

A couple of suggestions.

Please add a space between each 'Can's

Why not rephrase the last line as,

"If the face is the mirror of my mind,
I wonder what it is that you can see?"

I feel this would be a better sign-off.

Also I wonder how anyone would be able to see 'hope in your dreams' ... just wondering,.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Surabhi Kaushik

8 Months Ago

Thanks so much for your suggestions Ashan. I truly appreciate it.
I did not understand what .. read more
Oh wow. This is simply amazing.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Surabhi Kaushik

8 Months Ago

Thanks so much
Lana Huskins

8 Months Ago

No problem, keep up the good work! :)

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Added on January 18, 2017
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