Koshish Jeene Ki....

Koshish Jeene Ki....

A Poem by Surya

Jeene ki icha hai par
jaan tera saath hai,
sapno se saans le raha hu
par tune dadkan cheen li..
Shayar hu me, par tu meri
Shayari bangayi,
Ajeeb hai ye jeevan ka khel
Jisme seekhne keliye khona hi padta hai...
Dadkan sun nahi pa raha hu
Sirf tumhari hasi kaano me khel rahi hai,
Bulne ki koshish toh kar raha hu
Par yaad bahut aata hai...
 

© 2017 Surya


Author's Note

Surya
Another try in hindi, Hope you like it....

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So beautiful and emotional. Liked it a lot


Posted 6 Years Ago


Surya

6 Years Ago

Thank you Fathom, am glad you liked it...:)
that's such a wonderful attempt....that's too good...too nice!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Surya

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Wajihaa..:)
It looks good - the words are a work of art even though I do not know the meaning of the words.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Surya

6 Years Ago

Ohh, Thank you for your warm visit, am glad for it...
It's about Missing someone and trying t.. read more
True feelings nicely expressed....

Posted 6 Years Ago


Surya

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Saher....:)
Najam Us Saher

6 Years Ago

you're welcome.
This is good surya, i think you should change few words...in the second stanza "tu mera" should be "tu meri" in third stanza second line "sirf tumhaara" should be "sirf tumhaari"..and "kaano me khel raha" should be "kaano me khel rahi hai" otherwise the poem is very good though

Posted 6 Years Ago


Farhan Shaikh

6 Years Ago

Haha! It's fine not a big issue
Surya

6 Years Ago

Changed now....Thank you....:)
Farhan Shaikh

6 Years Ago

Yeah it sounds better now..
Very lovely, sweet and breathtaking...
I enjoyed it!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Your hindi in the poems is so pure and well written, I really enjoy your works Surya
Surya

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Shaan...It's a pleasure....
Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

No problem :)
An amazing poem... And that too in Hindi I loved it.
Love someone and wanna forget but can't.... described beautifully it ,Surya.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Priyanshi

6 Years Ago

pleasure is mine.
Surya

6 Years Ago

No it's mine for your visit, haha...Thank you..:)
Priyanshi

6 Years Ago

you're welcome. haha.

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Surya
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Hyderabad, India



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