Miss You..

Sometimes I feel alone...

Son, you are leading nowhere,

Oh my son! close your shatter box,

Seal your dreamy world,

Stop your sailing boat.

My son, It leads you nowhere,

Be a Bookworm, Win monthly funds,

Find happiness in six digits,

Travel from home to hell on four wheels.

My son this is life,

Your theatre in your brain

leads you nowhere except

an unworthy visit to wonderland...

Most of the father's I seen used to say these words and wanted their children to be as said...

But there are few, who says,

My son, You are a gift,

You are my love,

Your heart sings I know

Dance to those tunes...

My son you dream I know,

Let them happen,

Give them life

And live your own life..

I don't need any digits of paper,

I need days of your happiness

In which you smile and make others smile,

My son, Live your own life..

Dear son, living a life

doesn't mean earning money,

owning walls or cars,

Or sharing a life with loved ones...

My son, But living a life means,

Living in your dreams and 

bringing them alive,

Share your happiness with your loved ones,

Cry alone, Make everyone smile..

Ultimately live a life 

that you chosen, Don't sacrifice,

face your struggles alone,

Win your game, My son I wanna see you smile...

After all I could only say Miss you Dad...

Reviews

[Anjali]

Wow.... I don't have words for this! It's just so beautiful and amazing! You wrote truth in it. I loved it!

[Surya]

Thank you so much for your time r&r...:)

[Anjali]

No problem!

[rowan.taylorrr]

i love this, it shows so much love and it's very warming.

[Surya]

Thank you Xoxo..for your kind visit and words...am glad you liked it...:)

[Raj Sahu]

It is truly expressed here the expectations of a parent from his child. Parents needs to mend their minds as children are creative in their own way. You wrote it well. Keep writing.

[Surya]

Thank you Raj....:)

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful thoughts and emotion shared in the words.
"Ultimately live a life
that you chosen, Don't sacrifice,
face your struggles alone,
Win your game, My son I wanna see you smile...
After all I could only say Miss you Dad..."
I know and understood the above lines. We will live our own life and one day. Learn. We should of done many things different. Thank you Surya for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Surya]

Thank yo so much John...:)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Farhan Shaikh]

You nailed it Surya, yea you're absolutely right, most of the father do speak what you've written in the first 3 stanzas..
Amazing work truly

[Surya]

Thanks a ton Farhan....:)

[barleygirl]

You've crafted a very creative way to say what happens many times between father & son (or any parent & child): Some parents stress the importance of "Being Somebody" (important) or "Making Money" -- saying these should be the main goals in life, whereas sometimes a young adult will pursue something less rewarding monetarily, but it will bring the child much joy & satisfaction. You've drawn a nice comparison to help SHOW the way each of these parental approaches can hinder or encourage the young adult child. I believe you've mostly left it to the reader to decide, but a loving response is always best.

[Surya]

Yeah I have shown a path but it's ipto them to walk....Thank you Margie for your warm visit and words, am glad for them....:)

[barleygirl]

I prefer it when a writer leaves a lesson in their writing without saying "you should do this & you should do that" . . . it's always better to just leave it open for the taking.

[Surya]

You got it...That's what a message seems like...or else it would be an order...am no one to order them....it's just a message, haha...Thank you Margie...:)

[Zephyr]

Its just great Surya...
This is the best poem I have read about living a life we choose.
I am amazed by your skills and the smooth flow of your poem.
Really great work....:)

[Surya]

Thank you so much Naat..am glad for your words...:)

[Priyanshi]

your words just amazed me, Surya. everybody's dad wanna his son to read and write and want him to get a good job.but only few are there who want their child to live his dreams, never forces him to do anything that he doesn't want to do. This poem deserves appreciation. Great work.

[Surya]

He is my Dad, and am great ful for him....Thank u so much Priyanshi frm my hrt....:)

[Priyanshi]

You are welcome . I think my words hurt you, but i didn't mean to hurt you ,not about your dad.

[Surya]

Hey Priyanshi, your words never hurted me and why would they hurt when you spoke good about him, my father goes as second phase father which I explained......no worries, smile now...hahaha...Thank you for your words....an glad for them...:)

[Priyanshi]

Oh ! I thought it hurt you. Well, Thank You for clearing that confusion, now i'm happy .Have a nice day. It is really good poem, Surya.Keep it up.

[duff]

Our fathers wisdom cannot be measured. Their experiences, what they've seen can only enhance the decisions and advice they pass onto their own family. Your words radiate warmth and compassion. I really enjoyed this Surya. Nicely done.

[Surya]

Thank you so much Duff...am glad you enjoyed...:)

[duff]

You're welcome and I definitely did:)

[Mr.Writer]

Very true Surya... our parents usually say the right things to us, but we don't always listen, cause we're in this dreamy world...
Awesome poem!
Keep it up

[Surya]

Yeah Shaan, but there are few father's who beieves in dreams of their children...Thank you so much Shaan...:)

[Mr.Writer]

No problem