Alone But Alive...

Alone But Alive...

A Poem by Surya
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Just words...

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Feeling alone in feary world,
Day consumes me, 
Drops occupy Black.

A tear drop with your
Image shines like a moon
In this scary night,
But drop fades away..

Words killing me,
Blood flowing as ink
On my days as sheets,
My life a paint on oily canvas...

I want your smile for 
Hours and hours
Where you lying in my heart,
But now you are away...

Realised, regretted And
Am moving away
From my loss 
At cost of hearts and drops..

© 2017 Surya



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"Words killing me,
Blood flowing as ink
On my days as sheets,
My life a paint on oily canvas..."

This was the stanza which attracted me the most. I love your choice of title too. That realization is the turning point, I think, that no matter how alone we are, still we're alive.
Btw, did you mean "fiery"? "feary" doesn't seem right..
A good write, well penned, Surya :)

Posted 2 Days Ago


Surya

2 Days Ago

It is fiery, I will correct it, Thank you Yumna for your kind visit and words, am glad you enjoyed.... read more
YumnaKay

2 Days Ago

You're welcome, Surya. A pleasure always reading your works :)
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We all move on from loss of course but the heart seem a to hold pain, anguish, fear longer than happiness, as if to remind us that the good times will one day end.
Nice job Surya

Posted 2 Days Ago


Surya

2 Days Ago

True...Thank you Gee for your kind visit and words..:)
We cannot change the past but we can learn from it and move forward.
Tender, raw, real.

Posted 2 Days Ago


Surya

2 Days Ago

Yeah we can learn, Thank you so much Anastasia...:)
the most valuable lessons we learn in life often cost the most of ourselves. really lovely work.

Posted 2 Days Ago


Surya

2 Days Ago

Yeah, Thank you for your kind visit and words, Keep visiting...:)
moving away from the pain...but the tears still sting just as much---the loss, the vulnerability...the memories...

j.

Posted 3 Days Ago


Surya

3 Days Ago

They will, Thank you J..:)
Emotionally delicate with deep layers to peel back.

"A tear drop with your
Image shines like a moon "

A very cool line. Nicely done.

Posted 4 Days Ago


Surya

4 Days Ago

Thank you duff...:)
duff

4 Days Ago

You're welcome my friend.
just words,but deep and with meaning

Posted 4 Days Ago


Surya

4 Days Ago

Thank you Wordman...:)
Since I am a straightforward writer, I am fascinated by writers who can evoke emotion by throwing out a seemingly careless array of images & metaphors, without clearly connecting the dots, but the feelings come thru the word painting clearly anyway. I enjoy the way your metaphors & comparisons are consistent thru-out, with imagery blending ideas of drops, paint, & hearts.

Posted 4 Days Ago


Surya

4 Days Ago

Thank you so much Margie for connecting them....am glad you enjoyed it...:)
Some superb line made the whole poem very nice..i enjoyed

Posted 4 Days Ago


Surya

4 Days Ago

Haha, Thank you so much Farhan...am glad you enjoyed...:)
"At cost of hearts and drops.."- These lines are great...
A touching poem, Surya...
Keep writing!

Posted 5 Days Ago


Surya

4 Days Ago

Thank you so much Naat, am glad you liked it...:)

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