Baarish...!!

.............In rain

Socha tha haar gaye hum uss shaam ko

yaad hai woh din dil tuta tha tu mera...

har raat sharab ki baarish hora ha tha ghar me

aur tera waadon ka yaadein chal raha tha dimaag mein

dil me bus dard horaha tha....

kya kahe, hum toh sirf pyaar kiya tha..

chal raha tha baarish ke din

gadi pe hum the, haath me chai aur dil me tum

yaad aaraha hai mujhe woh din jab tu bi mujhe pyaar kiya tha...

aaj to tukde tulde karke fekdiya dil ko us nadi mein

din guzarte jaa raha tha....mousam badal raha tha

hum insaaan kya bangaye...

Fir se baarish horaha tha...

mein chaaiii peene chala tha

par socha nahi tha ki

woh tukde ikkatta karke le aaye tum...

ab toh kushi hogaya, fir se pyaar hogaya mujhse

aur ye insaan fir se paagal hogaya tujhpe...

Kahaani apna tab shuru hua joh chalta rahega..

Reviews

[pragya gaur]

Ignoring the errors it deeply Touched my heart....

[Surya]

Thank you so muchPragya for your kind visit and words...:)

[writ rajat]

Very hindi grammar errors

[Farhan Shaikh]

Really deep and heart touching..well done mate

[Zephyr]

A beautiful read Surya:)
I love reading your poems.
You improve my Hindi!

[Najam Us Saher]

Series of emotions.....Deep and heart touching...

[Surya]

Thank you Saher...:)

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.

[Sofia]

Beautiful...nd brilliant...i really liked it...despite some errors, it was was wonderful to read this poem..

[Surya]

Thankkkkk uuuuuuu soo much Sofia....:)

[Sofia]

Most welcome 😊

[Mr.Writer]

The emotions is this poem were really well done Surya!
"
har raat sharab ki baarish hora ha tha ghar me
aur tera waadon ka yaadein chal raha tha dimaag mein"
I really liked these lines, as you talk about how the person chugs up on alcohol in the sadness of her memories...
Amazing job, keep it up

[Surya]

Thank you so much Shaan....:)

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

so nice to read....an amazing write su...there were some errors with the spellings but that's all fine....and the poem was beautiful keep writing!

[Surya]

Yeah there are....Thank you so much Dear...:)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

always a pleasure...

[Abhishek Asthana]

so devoted one.. keep up the good work surya...very few MTI issues are there which will be automatically corrected by getting experience

[Surya]

I believe so...Thank you Abhishek...:)

[Priyanshi]

So cute poem........you always write soooooo brilliant poems...you leave me speechless....yuhi likhte raho...aur hum padte rahenge.... writer saheb.

[Surya]

Haha, sure...and thanks alot Priyanshi...:)

[Priyanshi]

My pleasure.