Dreamy Queen...

Mellidious song turned my mind

Swirling smile took my breath

Benevolent soul grasped mine

Where my eyes drowned in her glittery eyes..

Like a princess in a lilly crown

Moony shades on her dreamy gown

Speculating eyes all around

My heart dancing in her in and around..

Dancing in greeny garden

Covered by a murky sky

A flow of ocean beaneath our feet

Dreamy romance in my dream

Gypsy soul at your service

Lack of emotions for my urging heart

Hugged her tight in heavens of night

Mending our hearts together forever...

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong description took the reader to many visions. You made the reader feel and see many things. I like the flow of thoughts leading to a perfect ending. Thank you Surya for sharing your amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote

[Bala Gorthi]

Very beautifully dreamy poem. Resonating a true heart longing. Loved this one!

[Surya]

Haha, Thank you Bala..:)

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Loved it till the end. Wonderful! :)

[Surya]

Thank you for your kind visit and words...am glad you loved it..:)

[wordman]

a beautiful romantic write

[Surya]

Thank you Wordman...:)

[barleygirl]

I absolutely LOVE reading you becuz of your original style. Everything you say is simple & relatable, but it's never sounding cliché becuz you come up with little fresh tweaks to make your writing unique. Like "greeny garden" and "murky sky" . . . such fresh imagery (I'm so sick of blue sky!) I wonder if the first word might be "melodious" rather than what you've used?

[Surya]

I'll cross check it once again and will make changes if any.....Thank you so much Margie for your visit and qords...am glad for them...:)

[Mr.Writer]

The imagery, emotions and perspective of the dreamy queen is perfectly made!
Well done Surya, keep it up!

[Surya]

Thank you so much Shaan...am glad you liked it...:)

[Poetic Beauty]

This has a melodic tone to it. A dreamy lazy feel. Love the description in this piece. Romantic

[Surya]

Aww..Thank you...:)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

beautiful....highly imaginatiive...wonderful work.

[Surya]

Haha....for a princess....Thank you so much dear...:)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

always a pleasureee.

[Sofia]

That's beautiful. Imagination scales high in this one. Very nicely penned. Loved the second stanza. :)

[Surya]

Thank you Sofia...am glad for your visit...:)

[Sofia]

Pleasure is all mine :)

[pragya gaur]

Such a romantic one surya ji...Every girl is gonna love it trust saying.....great

[Surya]

Haha, Will try then...Thank you Pragya...:)