Beasts

How?
again.
Did I wander here-
to this Orphic delight,
waging wars until my flesh is flushed
until I am slick to touch
and why?
does it trouble you
that I have been here before
before...
you burned bright.
skin so white,
like a god.
I was there when you unleashed
your razor blade kiss
and thanked you even,
for the incision
because you were everything
that makes a desolate man,
a master.

How?
again.
Am I invisible beside you-
You are so strong,
I splinter around you
and why?
does it bother me
that you were here before
before...

I was worth
all manners of torture
you were here
between my immature legs
heavy and impulsive.
I guess,
There are  things in life
that have no exit
and I search for some sort of courage
to go on like this...
this time
between

the meetings and the leavings
it scalds me
down in my bones.
You live your life.
I have become the spaces in between.

Reviews

[DavidRyan]

AHHHHH! Okay. You know what? I'm done reading you. How about that? Now your extreme talent and way with words and imagery won't haunt me anymore. Won't taunt me that you're the best thing I have read in a long time and it makes me feel good. Looking forward to getting into someone's poem is a great thing, and you have me doing that every time. How old are you anyway? You better say 45, because you are way too wise to be young. Well written dear. I'm honestly trying to breeze through this review so I can move on to another poem.

[LJW]

You live your life.
I have become the spaces in between.

Ouch! Man, if that isn't something most of us can relate to right there. I love endings that kick me in the stomach like that.

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

it scalds me
down in my bones.
You live your life.
I have become the spaces in between.

good lord is that ever a searing ending. such a desolate achingwanting poem... amazing way to start my day

[cilla]

This is an absolute killer of a poem. The imagery sharp and cutting edge ... the desolate feeling of being used again ... what is it that draws us back to fill the spaces and love this beast?

Your poetry is truly remarkable.

[Vesa Lee]

Your talent is showcased exquisitely.
The images don't just penetrate the mind, they attack it.
No apologies offered.
Searing words.
Fantastically done.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow again your style and creativity bring out such vivid emotions... here I get the sense of frustration as two people have issues dealing with there partners past... though we all have one and that is something we can never erase... I also get the sense the writer feels like she takes a back seat to everything in her lovers life when you should be first.... all I can say is you really pull the reader in with your brilliant writing.

[An owl on the moon]

Your words are always so moving... amazing... Questions without answers dance down the page in a brilliant flow of life and existence. You always impress me with your insights and depth!

[Eagle Cruagh]

You just took your little hammer and
beat the hell out of men !

Good job, you broke their legs and we
shall know them by their limping.

Rated: 100 %

-----Eagle Cruagh

[Angel's Lady]

First of all, the picture ROCKS! Now, let me go read...

this time
between
the meetings and the leavings
it scalds me
down in my bones.
You live your life.
I have become the spaces in between.

Dang, girl. You can write the hell out of something! Beasts. Perfect name, too! Great write.
*stands, applauds* Author, author! Nicely done!

[Clockwork]

Dark a deep yes, but with a hypnotic kind of flow to it. I think that there is something that draws a reader into your pieces. You send messages in a real world kind of way that really gets through.