The Black Cat and the Guinea Pig

The Black Cat and the Guinea Pig

A Story by SweetNutmeg
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This little snippet came from a writing exercise.

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The lead character finds the love interest in a compromising situation!

 

A collaborative project with a quirky veterinarian leads to something more.

 

It's revealed that a major character is pregnant!

 

 

 

“Hello?” I knocked on the glass more loudly, hoping someone within would hear me. Damn, no receptionist. Fred was languishing apace in his cage. I could buy a new guinea pig if this one died, but how to get matching spots? How do you explain death to a classroom of five year olds?

 

Tired of knocking and waiting, I tried the door to the inner examination rooms. I smelled dog faintly, but mainly that sterile smell you get in hospitals. But I could hear the dogs. Fred cowered deeper into his wood chips.

 

“Hello?” I called again. A shape shot past my feet, a black blur, and it was followed by an out of breath man in a lab coat. He dashed straight at me. I put up Fred’s cage to ward off a collision, but he managed to hook around me into the nearest exam room and slam the door behind him.

 

What on earth?  I heard knocking sounds, combined oddly with cooing. The banging stopped, which made the cooing sound louder. The man emerged with a black cat wrapped in what would be a straight jacket on a human, but probably had some euphemistic term in the veterinarian world. The man was a good looking man now that I saw him standing still rather than running about. His face was flushed from his athletic exertions, but I thought his face would be rosy in any circumstance. He was that kind of blonde. A curly strawberry blonde, in fact. His blue eyes looked like nothing I had seen before in real life, like the depths of an ice cavern in the Antarctic, or the blue of some exotic fish in a coral reef. Our eyes met and then we both looked away. It was a glance that ambushed me with a crackling sexual energy I had not felt in a long, long time.

 

The black cat started purring loudly. I gladly looked down on it, to distract myself from the feelings bubbling to the surface. Transferring the cat to the crook of his left arm, the man offered his hand.

 

“Dr. Givings.”

 

I took his hand hesitantly and felt the jolt of attraction again.

 

“I’m Clara Mindler. I called about the guinea pig?”

 

“Yes, yes, of course. I’m so sorry there was no one to greet you. Our receptionist came down with the flu. Let me put this fellow back in his enclosure and I’ll be right with you. You can go in room four.”

 

I placed Fred’s cage on the examining table and took a seat. There was a detailed medical illustration of  the flea life cycle that I looked away from quickly.

 

In a moment Dr. Givings was back, looking less tousled and harassed.

 

“Let’s see, what have we got here? What are the symptoms?

 

“Well, Fred hasn’t been eating all we give him any more and hasn’t been on the exercise wheel in the last day or so. He seems to be pining, in general.”

 

Dr. Givings gently removed Fred from his cage and placed him on the table, then began palpating him.

 

“Well, Ms. Mindler, I think Fred needs a new name, as he is pregnant.” 


© 2015 SweetNutmeg



Author's Note

SweetNutmeg
http://www.springhole.net/writing_roleplaying_randomators/plotpunter_romance.htm

This is where I got my writing prompt.

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Didn't see that one coming. Would make a good entry for 'Short and Twisted' at Celapene Press (they look for short stories with a twist for their anthology). Well written, lively dialogue, action, paced well. Interesting events, funny ending. Good work.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SweetNutmeg

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)



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I liked this. Particularly how the little guinea pig hid in the wood shavings at the beginning, it was a cute image. And I was interested to see what happened with the characters as well. Good job.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SweetNutmeg

6 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing my little piece. I'm glad you were interested in the characters... read more
I like stories to have this kind of ending - well done and well written. Does the jolt of attraction perhaps lead on to chapter 2?
Regards,
Alan

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SweetNutmeg

6 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing. This was just a little throw away writing exercise. I do writin.. read more
Didn't see that one coming. Would make a good entry for 'Short and Twisted' at Celapene Press (they look for short stories with a twist for their anthology). Well written, lively dialogue, action, paced well. Interesting events, funny ending. Good work.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SweetNutmeg

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
But how did Fred get pregnant?
Does she live with other guinea pigs?

Posted 8 Months Ago


The Three directions and the story just add up but not after you have read it again. A really well written piece, i am new into writing but i certainly feel the way you have kept a check on the reader's attention

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SweetNutmeg

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and commenting. You may be new to writing, but your comments can be very valu.. read more
Very nicely penned. I enjoyed how the words scratch out at you,

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SweetNutmeg

9 Months Ago

I am so sorry I missed this review you wrote so long ago. I don't know how that happened. Please acc.. read more
ROBIN-RAMBLES-ON

8 Months Ago

That's alright have a nice day
Dashed through it, came to the finish.. looked for more, then, laughed, reallsing that was it. Started to think visuals in my mind, then, reread.... now smiling

Your words flow naturally as if speaking face to face - there are a few extra words but that's more natural than static formality. Tis a mix of fantasy, wit and the over=used word of the day - surrealism "

Thanks for sharing. Will read your longer posts another time. (Also have some prose here and there)


Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SweetNutmeg

9 Months Ago

I don't know how I missed this. Thank you for reading and reviewing my little piece of fluff. I'm gl.. read more
Ha! That's a great ending. You paint some vivid images in describing the man's eyes--good imagination! Also, you do well in portraying the exciting, electric vibes set off by contact with certain people. A very good and entertaining little write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SweetNutmeg

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your praise. I'm glad you enjoyed my little piece.
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AUU
So I'm guessing the top three bolded lines are your direction?

I have to say reading the directions again after I finished reading the story made me laugh.

My only criticism would be the cat seemed oddly silent. Maybe it's because this cat is simply the silent type, which is fine, but I would expect some growling or moaning of sorts.

But what a cliffhanger that is! I'm inclined to rate this lower (joke) because we never find out who impregnated Fred!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great story, really liked the ending. Will there be a sequel??

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SweetNutmeg

1 Year Ago

No, that's all there is! Thank you for your review. :)

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