Beth

This is for my friend

The petals on this flower haven't quite blossomed yet

The baby teeth have just finished falling from her poetry

her roots grow around blue lines on the pages in her notebook

her stem extends towards the audience 

still learning what it means to be graceful

her words flow steady and uneven 

still feeling the ground beneath them

with a shy confidence she lifts her head toward the sky

inhaling her dreams like the smell of fresh roses on valentines day

she bows with a delicate sigh 

she knows that she could be clipped at any time 

but she'll keep growing 

with her wide eyed radiance

towards the sun

Reviews

[The Verse: A Poetry Jou..]

The metaphor of flower, girl, person, combination is far too exhausted. you bounce from almost good literature to a diary approach of poetry. A bit confusing.

[Melanie Genevieve]

That's what I thought when I wrote this :) It's so over done but I felt like this was the best way to describe my very close friend who likes to think of herself as a rose. All my poetry is very closely related to the people in my life. Anything I write IS literally straight from my diary. I also didn't know that what I wrote for myself could even be considered poetry until my friend told me it was. I'm excited to start learning, growing and evolving. This website is such a great tool. Thank you sooo much for stopping by. It's awesome getting your feedback! I really appreciate it!

[The Verse: A Poetry Journal]

HAHA are you serious? well then it works. That is certainly interesting.

[Melanie Genevieve]

haha yes. I am quite new to all of this.

[Clockwork]

I like this poetic exploration of the self, and the idea that this young writer is growing toward maturity with her writing. This was my favorite line in the piece: The baby teeth have just finished falling from her poetry. That line is unique and it signals a coming of age with the writer. Keep on reaching Melanie :-)

[JC]

you have that knack of flowing in and out of reality, combining the 2, no doubt because you see the world so different from most.

[Lydia Shutter]

The metaphor of a person as a flower is splendid...unique. A poet becomes her poetry....she is born in between those blue lines of the notebook. Her roots are as strong as the vocabulary she employs. This is a strong write....and I enjoyed it. Lydi**

[Melanie Genevieve]

Thank you!! I'm really glad you enjoyed! :)

[Firestone Feinberg]

This is a wonderful poem. The analogy of the flower being a person is delightful. Writing is crisp and clear and full of grace. David

[Melanie Genevieve]

Thank youuu! :D

[Arsalan Kouser]

Hope...this is what I feel when I read this.

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Darling, this is beautiful. You are already in bloom!

[Melanie Genevieve]

XD d'awwww

[Sage Gabrielle]

"And the petals will be
so extraordinarily
pale."

i'm sorry i just can't get her poem out of my head asdfghjkl.
the beauty of uncertainty is that since we don't know what's going to happen, there's a possibility of almost everything happening. although that's overwhelming, that implies there are good things to come.

so, if i were her, i wouldn't be so scared of someone's clippers. they could just be pruning.

[Melanie Genevieve]

teehee

[Dutch Jr.]

"her roots grow around blue lines on the pages in her notebook
her stem extends towards the audience"

A very nicely done couple of lines here. I was quite impressed while reading this.

I assume that she wrote a poem and is kind of skeptical about reading it in front of a crowd nof people at first, but eventually she finds her voice, and blooms like the beautiful flower she is. Or at least that's what I got from it. At any rate, it's written extremely well, the poetic element of metaphorical symbolism at display and used extremely well in this one.

[Melanie Genevieve]

you got it spot on! that's exactly what I was going for! thanks so much & thanks for stopping by! I really appreciate it :)