Spires of science

Spires of science

A Poem by TLK

There was to be a tomorrow for us to share, but we ate it yesterday: greedily and with cream. I remember your face lit by the candlelight, so hungry for rebellion -- only as we swallowed the last morsels did we realise that hunger would have its revenge, a consequence of today's emptiness. Guilt sits heavy in our stomachs as we dream of the spaceships that have not been built, the spires of Science that we cannot contemplate while dreaming of technological emancipation. I held your hand and there was an old spoon still curled within it, I kissed your mouth and our promises still curdled in it. We could have had years together to watch progress unfold, but instead we burned through our possibilities with reckless passion, and its embers now grow cold.

© 2013 TLK



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Hey TLK - hope you've been keeping well. What a fantastic piece. "the spires of Science that we cannot contemplate while dreaming of technological emancipation" - the word awesome has never been so appropriate.
I'm sat here in the dark watching Fight Club and this really sent my mind off on one and I'm quite enjoying where it's ended up.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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A poem that makes a great point. Like the beautiful rose that is picked and no longer attended by the sun . Of fast pass world makes us act before we think. The end comes swiftly.

Posted 1 Month Ago


"We could have had years together to watch progress unfold, but instead we burned through our possibilities with reckless passion, and its embers now grow cold"....

A very powerful line that I feel many can relate to. People often are conflicted with the decision to allow their impulses take control with the risk of pain for the future or the decision to allow careful planning and etc to take control with the risk of never truly being in the moment of life.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Wow, this is really poignant. Thank you for sharing this.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Beautiful. I am at a loss of how to review this because I'm still caught by the imagery, snagged by the vivid I can almost reach out and touch it feel to this poem. It ensnares the senses. Again, simply beautiful.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Interesting format for a poem, but it is definitely poetic, so I can see why you would label it as such. I love the metaphors you used, especially saying that the promises had curdled. Is this about two people, or meant to generalize parts of society? Just curious.

Posted 1 Year Ago


This is really good. I got emotional.

Posted 1 Year Ago


At first glance I thought it a story presented in this style. But the fog cleared once I began to read. Nicely written. The flame still burns!

Posted 1 Year Ago


I like this. good picture you painted for us. I expected something that flowed rather than something that read like a paragraph from an overdetailed story but I enjoyed it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Beautiful piece of art! You painted a beautiful picture with your words!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Wow. I absolutely adore this. Usually, I get bored halfway through a lot of poetry I read, only because I have a short attention span, but the hook was great, and it just kept getting better. "we could have had years together to watch progress unfold, but instead we burned through our possibilities with reckless passion, and its embers now grow cold" The ending was beautiful, as was the rest of the poem. Bravo, my friend.

Posted 2 Years Ago



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