Unto My Day

When I rise the timing is right.

I look to the window. 

I feel the forecast.

The freshest air lingers before

dawn peaks light.  I'm cold.

I see the pigeons fight under

the street light for Mr.

Lee's crumbled bread. In a flash, 

dash to the roof to retreat. An

alley cat. So hungry, could eat a

bat. Rats! struggle for a drop 

of water, poisoned by city workers.

Slowly the daylight is bursting out

her sunny sun.

I'm full of life, recharged and 

ready for today's fun.

Reviews

[Taylor]

This was very good. It makes me wonder if you live in the city because you have describe what I think New York would look. Very good imagery. You are spectacular!!

[Chase Dylan]

Swooosh... Your style just flows straight like crystal water... It sucks you in from the start and ends at the end, for fun to begin, hah... Great write...

[ROXANE DORSEY]

Glad you like this short piece.

[Lydia Shutter]

The imagery is so precise, I felt as if I was watching the scene with you. Yes, mornings can recharge us....just like this poem does. Lovely. Lydi**

[ROXANE DORSEY]

comfort time of my day, and thanks for the review.

[Carola]

a nice early morning description in a nutshell, an interesting glimpse.
" i'm full of life, recharged and
ready for today's fun." hahaha! sometimes i feel like that, but only sometimes.
i like your poem.

[ROXANE DORSEY]

thanks very much Carola for the kind review.

[Joseph Mulpeter]

I liked this poem, good job!

[ROXANE DORSEY]

thanks for the kind review.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really like the in-rhyme scheme to this...

[ROXANE DORSEY]

thank you very much for the review.

[wordman]

sounds like real life,great

[ROXANE DORSEY]

that's whats great about it, real as can be for me. thanks for the kind review.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very interesting poem. You made the city and place come alive for the reader.Thank you Roxane for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[ROXANE DORSEY]

glad you could review my poetry and like it. thanks

[Coyote Poetry]

I always enjoy your work and you are welcome my friend.

[Zoya]

Such a refreshing piece! Could make anyone jump out of their beds and abandon their mode of laziness.Gives out really positive vibes. Well written!

[ROXANE DORSEY]

Thanks for the wonderful review.

[Zoya]

No problem

[Shy Joe]

The concrete jungle and all it's inhabitants. Preying upon opportunity. With the briskness of a falls morning in the air. That will wake you up and get you going.

Enjoyed your poem. Thanks for sharing.

[ROXANE DORSEY]

Glad you could enjoy, thanks for the kind review.