Hero's Sacrafice

Hero's are sacrifice,
Freedom's ultimate price.
What we want, what we need
It truly is the hope of being freed.
As the funeral bells of the fallen rings
The voices of the finally freed sings
"You my friend are the gift of the goddess"

Forever true in the pages of history

Will their achievements be remembered?

For all heroes to admire

            ~Alex

Reviews

[李[A]]

Hey once again. I would first like to address the grammar issue.
Line two: Freedoms ultimate price.
-Freedoms should be Freedom's.
Second of all, I'd like to address the flow of the poem. There doesn't appear to be a clear transition between lines four and five which makes that transition a little unclear and choppy.
Other than that, this is pretty decent! I hope this helps :).

[Alex Figueroa]

haha again thank you, muah!

[Alex Figueroa]

thnx hunny, it really is meant to open some eyes =]