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This is my first attempt at slam poetry, and I'm excited to film a performance of this piece over the coming day.
Star-Seeing and Open Windows

Star-Seeing and Open Windows

A Poem by TadKent
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Lyrics to a song I wrote. Wish you could hear me play it. ; )

"

 

Marie saw a star

Somewhere not far from here

It winked out goodbye,

as it sailed through the sky...

 

Somwhere on Earth

A little girl started to smile.

It stretched far and wide,

anyone could see it for miles.

 

Maybe you'll see her,

Lookin' out her window?

Searching for hope

Or maybe a star-show...

Maybe a star-show?

 

Brad saw the sun

It was a little too bright for his eyes

He only came out at night,

Where he knew he could hide...

 

Alone in his room,

A little boy started to cry.

Face to the bed,

He'd always wonder why?

 

Maybe you'll see him

Lookin' out his window?

Searching for hope

Or maybe a star-show...

Maybe a star-show?

 

Maybe you'll see me

Lookin' out my window?

Searching for hope

Or maybe a star-show...

Maybe a star-show?


© 2010 TadKent



Author's Note

TadKent
Better with piano. = ]

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"It winked out goodbye,
as it sailed through the sky..."
I really like this part a lot. I like the whole poem of course, but I don't know, I really like that part. I can imagine it easily. The ending is brilliant too. Great poem. I'd love to hear it with the piano going along with it. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


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A twinkling piano, no doubt. It does read as a song lyric. so that counts me out for recitals.
ATB
Alex.

Posted 5 Years Ago


This is very moving and touching. I like this a lot, enjoyed it very much, I can just imagine it sounding so great with the piano. I agree with Laura, I too really love that quote.
"It winked out goodbye,
as it sailed through the sky..."
Lovely... really.

Posted 5 Years Ago


I like this one. When I was a little girl, one could catch me looking for a shooting star or even a brightly twinkling star. Magical write!

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is really nice. The flow was nice to it too. Good job and it would be good with a piano. My friend could help you out. She is helping me out with it. Well this was nice. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


This has nice phrasing; I love the image it creates while reading it. I'm sure it's a quite lovely song to listen to as well :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


I don't think it would be better with a piano, all I'm gonna say is in your version on youtube you changed the line: "Face to the bed" to "Alone in his bed" or that's what it sounded like anyway and I think it fits better.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Just so you know, I checked out your acoustic version video of the song.... Tad, I had no idea you were so talented in so many ways! Both your singing & your writing are very nice!

Being able to watch the video gave me the chance to truly & fully appreciate this wonderful song. Thank you for sharing, I really enjoyed listening you sing!

P.S. - Your voice is really nice, exactly the kind of music I'm into! =D

Posted 7 Years Ago


Hey, just so you folks know, I just posted an acoustic version of this song on youtube. Just go here: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fD_xpUFTOrg .
Love you all, and thanks for the reviews. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Excellent one...I am sure that it is excellent with music..Keep the creative pen flowing...May your gift increase over the next years and touch on the lives of many in a positive way...Sunflower/Sara

Posted 7 Years Ago


Well, you've certainly lived up to what is written on your profile.
you've certainly got songwriting talent, the lyrics are simple, not heavily laden with imagery like a lot of songs these days.

I absolutely love the lines about the "star-show". It's really something different, and catchy.



Posted 7 Years Ago



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