"When Skies Are Grey(The Sunshine Song)"

"When Skies Are Grey(The Sunshine Song)"

A Poem by TadKent
"

A song I wrote for Lisa. I hope it explains a little of our story to you.

"

The other night dear, while I lay sleeping

I dreamt I held you in my arms.

When I awoke love, I was mistaken.

So I hung my head, and I cried.

 

Where did today go?

 

I've been trying to find a way love,

To say "I'm sorry" without the words.

It's just a song dear, but I'm hoping

It'll heal at least a little of the hurt.

 

Where'd that sunshine go?

 

You are my sunshine, my only sunshine

You make me happy when skies are grey.

You'll never know dear, how much I love you.

Please don't take my sunshine away.

 

I've been thinking something lately,

That if I've got you everday...

What's my excuse then, what's my problem?

Why are any days grey in the first place?

 

 


© 2010 TadKent



Author's Note

TadKent
Sung to the classic tune (mostly).

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Ya know I downloaded that song and added it to my itunes last night. Interesting interpretation of the song and it's meaning. I like how you combine it with your own feelings, but I, personally, think that you can go far deeper into your own emotion. I think that the things you say, especially in the last few lines are lacking some spark that I'm pretty sure you could give it if you dug deep enough. You've got a lot of talent. I like reading your work... but I think everyone, a lot of writers, are afraid to hit that dark nerve that really digs into wounds. I suspect there is a wound here somewhere. Embrace it. Dig into it. And this poem will be amazing.

Be careful using so many lines of an already popular song in your work.

Thank you for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Why indeed?
Alex.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Very sweet and nice. I love this part here as well as the ending question in the last stanza:
"You are my sunshine, my only sunshine
You make me happy when skies are grey.
You'll never know dear, how much I love you.
Please don't take my sunshine away."

Posted 5 Years Ago


nice integration of the song into your poem, kind of like the speaker is hearing the song in his/her mind while thinking about his/her current situation. Very effective.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Awww brought a tear to my eye...

Posted 6 Years Ago


This one touches my heart deeply. My father use to sing this to me all the time.. so this made me smile to see your embrace of this song.. A new favorite:) xx

Posted 6 Years Ago


you have an eloquent way of expressing emotion. nice work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Aw this is beautiful and so romantic. I also write lyrics.

Posted 6 Years Ago


A amazing poem. Most of us learn what we had when they are walking away. I like the movement and flow of this poem. The mind is a pain in the butt. Bring back the good memories making us wish we could find a way to forgiveness. Complete poem was strong. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


this is a very melancholy poem. Great job :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


so sweet. what a lovely gesture. well done.

Babs xx

Posted 7 Years Ago



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TadKent
TadKent

Fresno, CA



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