Grey-Sky Lullaby

I was asked to write a song for a wedding. Here the resulting lyrics.

 

I'll try this on with you

I'll write a song for you

Lay out this quilt on a hill

Listen for the birds as they

Sing that pretty story of

A girl who found a love that was real

It's ok, It's ok.

 

You'll put on that pretty dress

The one the crowd will like the best

White dress you'll only wear for a day

Then we'll see our families

You're smiling as you walk with me

The sky will watch the doves fly away

It's our day, It's our day

 

Oh, oh falling in love from the start

Oh, but now that I know who you are

I love you more

Breathe slow, honey oh darling we both know

I wouldn't trade you for a star,

I love you so

 

Oh, oh, falling in love from the start,

Oh, but now that I know your whole heart

I love you more

Breathe slow, honey oh darling we both know

I wouldn't trade you for the stars,

I need you so...

Author's Note

I know the last two stanzas are almost identical, i just included both because one is sung softley, and one is belted at full volume. I didn't want to include only one because I didn't want the song to be too short.

Reviews

[SamBug]

Oh, oh, falling in love from the start,

Oh, but now that I know your whole heart

I love you more

Breathe slow, honey oh darling we both know

I wouldn't trade you for the stars,

I need you so...

This is the sweetest lines I have ever heard. It was the best part of this whole poem. You're an amazing writer. please don't ever stop!!!!

[Lorame]

So touching and moving. Very beautiful. The flow and wording contributes to the impact of it. Nice job!

[Moonflower]

Oh, oh falling in love from the start

Oh, but now that I know who you are

I love you more

Breathe slow, honey oh darling we both know

I wouldn't trade you for a star,

I love you so


......I really enjoyed these last lines. This is a beautiful vision of pure, true love. This was like a fairy tale, If only wishes did come true. Lovely, darling.

[Tea And A Cheshire Smil..]

I love your lyrics ^^ Another great song. I'm glad that you chose to write it more about love instead of making tons of references to an actual wedding :) I think it's much better than it would've been if you'd tried too hard to relate it to a wedding. In all, beautiful lyrics and a job well done

[Rae]

That was perfect! I loved it so much! Great job!

[Stammers]

'now that I know your whole heart
I love you more'

That's perfect for a wedding day, something permanent and truthful. I don't review songs very often because I haven't got a clue about writing them or the process from there on, but athe ctual content of the lyrics is gorgeous, you've got a very natural way of putting things.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Great love lyrics that you have composed...Great love story..Keep up the good work..Sunflower/Sara

[Marie Harrison]

Such a beautiful poem. It leaves me breathless and dreamy. Fabulous job.

[thatbryngirl]

So beautiful...that's so cool that you got to play for a wedding! Anyway, I loved this:)

[Lilly]

So beautiful - I got chills as I read this - is that weird? probably...

beautiful song

[The Fatal Lover]

I really enjoyed this. I would love if someone wrote a song like that for me. Great job. I loved it. =)