I'm Yours

Some forms of love cannot be understood.

I long for the way you used to make me feel,
How you convinced me that nothing exists;
The time we danced in the lonely darkness,
The way you stole air from my lungs with a kiss.

 

I will be yours but you will never be mine,
That is the way it is supposed to exist for eternity;
Not a soul can ever comprehend this relationship,
And how it could have me leaping with glee.

 

Many wonder how I could stand such madness,
Claiming that what I do is a mistake;
But my love for you will always be overwhelming,
And my soul is yours, not to share with me,..
                                                         But to take.

Reviews

[Lina Grey]

To me, the entire poem screams death. I'd think of this as being the work of a sociopath, who has come to face his love alone at last. An impressive, inspiring piece. Thank you.

[Legolas]

Wonderful poem. Haunting in a way. I couldnt guess who the love is for:/ oh well. Great write!

[Tai Chi Italy Take Two]

I was attracted by your name, as it is mine!lol but not exclusively and only my shortened nick name...I am very pleased to read this lovely romantic muse of yours though, it skips along with the power of all consuming love, and the final line is precious.

Good to meet your work

Smiling at you

Tai

[Kristin]

i could literally feel my heart drop as I read this good work :)

[Grayeyes]

Emotional and heart grasping. Death and Love. Love falls to Death. It's beautiful. Good job.

[Michael G.]

Technically, this is another well written poem, Ryan. Good work.

[Owlgirl]

I agree with xxxrawr_friendxxx, I believe your character is in complete love with death. It's a great poem, amazing vocabulary choices and the flow is smooth. Well written, another great one.

[xxxrawr_friendxxx]

I think it's Death lol. But whoever it is, this poem is extremely well written and I really like it. :3 There are multiple perspectives when you love something you can't have...some think it's sad, others think it's happy.

[Southern Cross]

Since I am new to your writings and without a depth of understanding your persona, I shall take the words you have written and just use my own imagery here. On this level I can relate to the words, beyond your imagery unto yourself. It is dark emotions either way it is comprehended and a very good read.

[Wondering Mind]

it could be the Count himself.
Who ever the character is, this is well penned.