Gone

Gone

A Poem by Tai-San
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This is for my Best friend. she was gone way too soon and i can deal with no more pain.

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Gone
Thou art gone,
Now am I.
I can’t hide what I feel,
Though I’ve tried.
I miss thee too much,
Even to my own life.
Now mine shall be taken,
As I cry each moment.
 
Unable to say goodbye am I,
And I cannot go on,
So now I will say,
We can both be gone.
 
I refuse to let thee be alone,
Thee were my best friends.
For someone to just tell me thou art gone,
Is my end.
 
I wont live without thee,
My best friend.
For you are the only one I could truly trust.
I miss you to much to let thee go.
And now shall I be with thee.

© 2009 Tai-San



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The pain you have can be seen through this poem. Calling it a work of art would be a disgrace on what it is meant for, this is a true piece of your soul put onto paper (or in this case website)

This poem speaks from deep down and reading this caused me to really think about each sentence, each word as they fit together perfectly. A poem should come from the heart, well this poem comes from deeper I think, I liked this one a lot

I would say keep up the good work but I hope things like this don't happen more often just to get a good poem like this, I hope the next poem I read from you will be a happy one

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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deep, thought provoking and emotional....

Posted 6 Years Ago


Sweetheart , I love the old English style of writting-- I miss Bella too, Jasperess. She, like you, was/ is in my heart. ‹3

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Ron
Tai-San, You were far too good for him! Better off without him! He could never write like you. Tell you what, next poem, write about what disgusted you about him! Yes girl, let him have it both barrells.

Posted 7 Years Ago


This was really good, & very emotional.
It made me cry. It really did.
Great Job.
Believe it or not I lost a friend at one point too.
Bet you didn't know that about me.
XOXO
Becca!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Such an emotional poem, I thought it was an excellent write, it really shows your pain and as another review said 'this is a true piece of your soul put onto paper (or in this case website)' I completely agree with this and that makes it a good write, poetry always needs strong feelings behind it in my opinion!

Brilliant poem, the pain won't go away any time soon but use her memory and all those feelings to write more poems like this, it'll help.



Posted 8 Years Ago


i read it... just sayin

i dont like to read somethin and not let u know i read it

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow! this is a truly touching piece. I could see you crying in the lines. I could really sense your pain. I lost my little brother, and this poem reminds me of how I felt, like a piece of my soul had been ripped out--never allowing me to be the same. Death changes you. It changes the way you think about things, and it also changing your perception of life. Thank you for sharing. I really appreciate reading this. Just know that you're not alone when it comes to feeling the after affects of departing from a love one. Time will lessen the pain, but never the memories. God bless you sweet heart.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Drop the "thees" and "thous", or write more archaic to match them. Otherwise a very emotional piece. I like the fact that you basically state that in her death, you have also died. It's interesting how our identities are so tightly wound around the friends we keep. Whenever we lose one, we lose a bit of ourselves.

It's a good poem. You should try writing something light hearted once in a while, though. Just for kicks.

Posted 8 Years Ago


The pain you have can be seen through this poem. Calling it a work of art would be a disgrace on what it is meant for, this is a true piece of your soul put onto paper (or in this case website)

This poem speaks from deep down and reading this caused me to really think about each sentence, each word as they fit together perfectly. A poem should come from the heart, well this poem comes from deeper I think, I liked this one a lot

I would say keep up the good work but I hope things like this don't happen more often just to get a good poem like this, I hope the next poem I read from you will be a happy one

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great write full of emotion. I didn't like the thee and thou, but I still like the poem. Good job.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Tai-San
Tai-San

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I am single and an age. I hate people, but I love them. I get scared very easily and, well, i wont say why. I'm a poet, though i'm bad at it. My best friends are: Wa Ya As The Gothic Cowboy, ATG, .. more..

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