Broken Heart

Broken Heart

A Poem by Anonymous Girl
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How someone feels when they get left behind, especially a girl.

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You left me.
I don't know where are you.
You left a note:
"You are as beautiful as a butterfly,
But am sorry my love
We can't be together.
Because I can't love you
As you want me to."

My heart is broken,
Like a shattered mirror
On the floor.
In thousand pieces.
No-one can put it together.
No-one can dare to pick it up.
No-one can fill it with love.
No-one can take place in that
Broken heart.

But...
You could put it together.
You could dare pick it up.
You could fill it with love.
You could take place in that.

However, you aren't here.
You can't do any of that.
My heart is broken.
And it will stay like that.
For my whole life.

It will get a designation of
Broken heart.

© 2012 Anonymous Girl



Author's Note

Anonymous Girl
Please do tell me how is this one..
This is first sad poem I wrote (I guess).
Enjoy!!

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so beautiful and nice and heart touching...........i really liked the second stanza.the comparison of the broken heart to the broken mirror is just so sublime and great.the diction you have used is pretty nice too......but something is wrong in the fifth line of the first stanza,revise it.anyway.great work my friend....

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Anonymous Girl

5 Years Ago

Oh I did that on purpose to make it look like a conversation :)
Thanks for the review :)
The dark story

5 Years Ago

it's my pleasure!!!1



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I know this feeling exactly. only Butterfly was replaced with a dreamers metaphor. You definitely captured this feel, but I do think the two stanzas of nothing but repetition were a little much or could have been worded a little differently, because as they are now, they just kinda make the piece feel like its dragging on.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Anonymous Girl

3 Years Ago

Ah okay, I will edit it as soon as i can. Thanks for pointing out and suggesting :)
And thanks.. read more
My heart is broken.
And it will stay like that.
For my whole life.
SOOOOOO beautiful and very loveful too, this one is like never forgetable. Very nice.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Anonymous Girl

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much :)
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I felt the same way on more than on ocasion. Its hard to pick your self up after something like that. Very nicely writen.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Anonymous Girl

4 Years Ago

Thank you :)
It was beautifully written at the least, so you don't have to worry, *thumbs-up*

At least, you're not writing anything so depressing so it's really great ^-^

100/100

Posted 4 Years Ago


Anonymous Girl

4 Years Ago

Lol thanks :)
Rhianne Ney

4 Years Ago

You're welcome
Very lovely in a sad sad way:(. This is so easy to relate to, for anyone who has had their heart shattered by another, that hopeless feeling and futile wishes he would change his mind.... Well penned

Posted 4 Years Ago


Anonymous Girl

4 Years Ago

Thank you. I appreciated it
it's really touching......n d comparison wid d broken mirror is smthing dat really got me!!!!nice one!!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Anonymous Girl

5 Years Ago

Thanks :)
Flutterby aish

5 Years Ago

welcome!! :)
Anonymous Girl

5 Years Ago

:)
So sad !!!! but everyone's heart is not the same. people can't stay broken :( they look for another love!!:( try to fix a broken glass but they dont realize that glass was already broken and u can still the crack life long!!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Anonymous Girl

5 Years Ago

Thanks for reviewing
Awwww, soooooo sad, the shards scattered aimlessly from a broken mirror, a reminder that love can be broken and hearts scattered to the wind... very emotional ;)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Anonymous Girl

5 Years Ago

Thanks.. I don't where does this stuff comes from.. I justw write it down when it suddenly appears o.. read more
Castonovia

5 Years Ago

No problem, keep doing what you're doing ;p
Anonymous Girl

5 Years Ago

I will and you too :)
Its a very surreal setting, quiet and sad almost as if you can hear the mirror breaking that is your heart.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Anonymous Girl

5 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Very bautiful and sad, love can be both a blessing and a curse.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Anonymous Girl

5 Years Ago

Ture. Thanks :)

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