I WAS HERE

It's all about finding your strength,and not giving up by fighting hard

Author's Note

I was here like nobody cared,
left in the cold out there,
In isolated solitary lost in purgatry with fear,
My lungs azoic without life to respire,
fear for death my face filled with tear,

With no hope and nobody to share,
My pain and sorrow i felt that life wasn't fair,
It felt like,i have been here for a year,
But i was just here,
Right here sitting in these dusty and rusted chair,

I silence i stared and stared with no glimpse of hope near,
Then i screamed with courage which i acknowledge that chased away my fears,
Now i can hear myself breathing,breathing fresh air,
I have hope,hope to strive and persever,
This is a message to you my dear,
It is i GIDEON,i did presever.

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I love the thought...finding one's courage. When it seems that life wasn't fair enough, just hold on to your faith so that your strength will help you survive. I have passed that road once in my life, and I know you can move on from that.

It so happened that the title is "I was Here" but the content of the poem "was not there where it supposed to be" and instead there in Author's note. Lol. Smile. :)

There are just few little things to fix here: the word "persevere", the pronoun "i" to be "I", "purgatory", ...in these ( should be "this") dusty and rusted chair, I silence (should be "In silence").

Other than that, this is a nice poem in general. :)

[Talkless]

Thanks!!!i will make corrections

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem. I like the energy and hope in your words. We can never give in. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Talkless]

Thank you so much!!!

[jerrypat]

Putting your soul into this poetry, I could feel it in my heart. Hopelessness and pain was eventually firmly rooted out and hope was restored with all that goes with that word.

[Talkless]

Thanks!!!! you so much

[S.R. Madeline]

I like the imagery and the flow is nice. You have to make sure you double check tenses, "I felt like, I have been here for a year". I loved the line, "My lungs azoic without life to respire".Good job!

[Talkless]

Thanks!!!! I will make corrections

[Talkless]

love it it was epic