SICKNESS

SICKNESS

A Poem by Talkless
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short story line

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© 2013 Talkless


Author's Note

Talkless
I feel ill
I look pale with so many wrong thought causing me a fever
Once a strong and vibrant boy becomes a diva activically
My breath goes shallow.
My head pounds in pain.
Vision blurry,twisted mind set
tuned to nothing but pain and sorrow.
i can fill my mouth as dry as the barren desert.
Lost in my own sub-conscious
what kind of feeling is this?
I never wanna get sick again.

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The feelin you get been sick

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ha!!! Getting sick is no fun. You portray that feeling wonderfully. I was going to comment on the filling thing, but looks like dhaye beat me to it. Darn it! Did you write this after or during you were sick or was it just random?

Posted 10 Years Ago


Talkless

10 Years Ago

It was during my ill health....thanks all the same BOB
"what kind of filling is this." --Do you mean what kind of FEELING is this?

Oh, this is so emotional, T. I never want to be sick, too. But sometimes when what you see is different from what you have thought/dreamed of, would you be happy?



Posted 10 Years Ago


Talkless

10 Years Ago

Thank you dear i will make correction.
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

10 Years Ago

You're welcome. :)
"My breath goes shallow.
My head pounds in pain.
Vision blurry twisted mind set
tuned to nothing but pain and sorrow"

A splendid read and write...I like those lines the most...:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Talkless

10 Years Ago

Thanks sami
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)
mehn!.. niggah thoughts b like way out of this planet.. u good man.. *kahlliphat*

Posted 10 Years Ago


I laughed when I read the final line - I never wanna get sick again.
This is a really straight forward poem. It's nice.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Talkless

10 Years Ago

Thanx alot mindy
That is of course a disgustingly nauseating feeling, penned down so well! Nice poem!

Read my poems too :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Talkless

10 Years Ago

Thanx brov
The feeling you get when sick.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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