Would you like to rethink that?

Would you like to rethink that?

A Poem by Alex Falkner

I have suffered more, than some people would care to know.

But I ask the question, Why do you belittle me so?

You say I am nothing but a weak attention seeker.

But look again, think it through, which one of us is weaker?

You who had the easy life, silver spoon and silver platter.

Or me who had the abuse, the hell, the batter.

You who had a clear road set ahead for you.

Or me who had to fight and struggle, just to make it through.

You struggle with a red light, while I wait patiently.

You get stuck in traffic as you know no other way.

While I take the back roads, it's longer, but I'll get there anyway.

So now Mr rich man, Do you see the point I make?

Which one of us is stronger, Which one is truly richer?

See it now?

Get the picture?


© 2015 Alex Falkner



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Love the flow to this and the tone is spectacular. You tell 'em sweetheart!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Great flow and good metrica, deep meaning and easy-to-understand lexic,
Very cool :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


well said
well written

Posted 4 Years Ago


while we live everyday like we are dying any moment
a brother in Canada tells me to hang on and toughen up
how more can i get tough,my nerves are on edge almost all day
but if you read whats written in the old books for some big ones
they all created themselves and turned into big talent that way
on my profile i said, its out of too much sufferings and lots of tears
its the way people look at us that reflect such beauty made out of
yet more and more pains,its living every moment when you feel like
dying every second..nerves so tight ,mind so upright and shiny
always at work,cheeks all red heart throbbing..its a fast life,it is life
lovely write

Posted 4 Years Ago


Alex Falkner

4 Years Ago


Thank you for your review.
And I agree, no matter how "tough" or "hardened" someone h.. read more
bluessadmood

4 Years Ago

hello,anytime you like i am a great listener,ha ha..
here is people i like,vulnerable ,weak,ha.. read more
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Ink
Enjoyed this!
The middle of this poem, when you start comparing the main character and the Rich Man, is where this really felt meaty to me. Thought it was smart of you to use more accessible comparisons that most of your audience will resonate with (ie. the red light and the back roads).

The ending seemed a little bit lacking in comparison to the strength of the rest of the piece though. I feel the poem might have been much stronger if you ended it at "Do you see the point I make?"

Just some food for thought =]

Posted 4 Years Ago


Alex Falkner

4 Years Ago


Thank you for your review.
I do see your point of view on this, however I used this p.. read more
Ink

4 Years Ago

New Zealander? That's awesome! I always wanted to visit that place.
This is the type of feedba.. read more
Alex Falkner

4 Years Ago


Cool.
:)
New Zealand is a nice place, the scenery is beautiful, I should get s.. read more
Well-written, amazing, and honest. I can relate to this piece...Great job! :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alex Falkner

4 Years Ago

Thank you.
Lately I have been writing what I know, true to life, and it seems to be better tha.. read more
TheLastThingYouSee

4 Years Ago

You're welcome! :) Most of my poems are inspired by emotions at the time I write them, so they're us.. read more

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Added on March 17, 2013
Last Updated on June 1, 2015
Tags: Abuse, pain, struggling

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Alex Falkner
Alex Falkner

South canterbury, New Zealand



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I have always been a very solitary person, I am 31 years old, and have suffered with depression for about 25. (if you think it doesn't add up, read slices of life) I have also suffered with agorap.. more..

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