The Beach

My break away from writing about depressing s**t

lets party up, yeah

put your hands in the air

take a drink, take a hit

throw away every care

and I promise that tonight will be

the end of, 

self loathing and pity

lets go,

bottoms up lift it up

gonna roll soon, so hurry it up

go chug chug chug

got two more to go

wont stop, 'til the booze is gone

hell we're kids we got, time to blow

we got lost on that, four hour drive

on the way to the beach

where we feel so alive

not a care in the world

but another party 

another girl

lets pretend, it's Vegas for a night

and throw our hands

into the sky

lets go,

bottoms up lift it up

gonna roll soon so hurry it up

go chug chug chug

got two more to go

wont stop till the booze is gone

hell we're kids we got time to blow

forget, everything

lose yourself, in the scene

girl take my hand, and 

come with me

between the sheets

our own fantasy

forget, everything

lets lose ourselves, at the beach

Author's Note

FEEDBACK, notes for improvement, etc.

Reviews

[Ian Faraway]

HA! A party poem. For some reason, I find these pretty hard to write. But I love this one. J'adore.

[*Evelen*]

Awesome poem. Sounds happy and fun, and loved the "bottoms up lift it up." :)
Well done.

[kdpgrahi]

Beautifully narrated.Beach here is a resort only, not of much importance. Forget everything is the principal message. I like the concept and the message as well.

[Helpless]

so many different things you can do with the concept of the beach, i like your version, very playful and fun to read!

[Smokey]

Brilliant! :) you've got real range as a a poet, great write :D

[Tkess]

I agree with Erika, This sounds like this could be a song. Maybe add another verse and use the let's go stanza as your chorus.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A true and bare prose that leaves the mind tingling, well done

[Carrion.]

haah
i like it^-^
sounds like a song..
gramar errors..