Be My Safe Place

We're all told to live 

The way that we want 

Your strength you must give 

To help break the bond 

What is the point 

Of leaving the ground 

If once you take off 

You just get shot down 

No reason to try 

For when my  

Wings have grown 

Big enough to fly 

They are clipped 

And I am thrown 

To the bottom 

Be my safe place 

Help me grow 

Embrace me here 

Make sure I know 

I'm not alone. 

Reviews

[Shy Joe]

Even when our wings are clipped, we must learn our own strengths. No matter the situation, there is no safer place, than your own. Although, it is nice to share it with good company. As long as they're cooking dinner.

Enjoyed your poem. Thanks for sharing.

[Taz]

Hahaha, thank you.

[Saumya]

As a human being, all we essentially need deep inside our hearts, is somebody we can always count on, no matter how clumsy, messey, and melancholic life may turn into.The one who supports us, in all ways possible, specially at the time when even we give up on ourselves.

This is for sure, a very precise writing, very eloquent, and has a very strong theme. Well done Taz😊

It was wonderful going through your work. Keep writing!😊

[The Exiled Wolf]

I used to hear a lot of stuffs like "explore what you want to do" or "do what you love in your life", but when it comes to the time when I get to decide, they become "think about making a living" or "if you do that, you will be always ranked lower than the others". Turns out that all the beautiful pictures that they've painted are just lies. They have given me the choice, but at the end of the day I don't have it. Reality and expectations choose my life for me. I love the metaphor and the last few lines which depicts the thirst for support. Even if you don't like my dream, at least please don't stop me from trying...

[Dan James]

This really connects well with me, especially coming out of High School, and going into College. Learning how to live my own, trying to live life to the dreams I've always had of being in college, but in reality, it gets shot down by the demand of money and time.
Very relatable, and nicely worded.

[Brandon Mineo]

It's good and sad. I relate to it.

[Warrior]

Breath taking. Beautiful. Short and to the point I love this

[Taz]

I like being to the point.

[Bina]

short and meaningful, makes a nice point, to me, reaching out even when down

[Taz]

Thank you.

[barleygirl]

Now here's one with no commas & I like it that way much better. I like straightforward writing, as I'm not that good at guessing the meaning of nuanced writing, so I like this about your message (clarity). This is my favorite part: "What is the point of leaving the ground if once you take off you just get shot down" -- nicely crafted with rhyme, rhythm, & strong relatable meaning.

[Kimiko Watson]

"What is the point
Of leaving the ground
If once you take off
You just get shot down" your poem is so deep. This speaks volume to me.

[Taz]

Thank you, I'm glad you could relate.

[Kimiko Watson]

you are welcome

[Chase Dylan]

Breath is fantastic here, clipped and measured lines deliver until I feel secure enough to fly... This is quite good, hope I do not get shot down... Very cleanly penned...

[Taz]

Thank you.

[Chase Dylan]

You are welcome...