HONESTY

HONESTY

A Poem by Tazeen Ahmed
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Honest indeed matters in our lives ..... doesn't it ?

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Honesty is the facet of a moral character

it is the policy of an abstractor

it is an obligation of the prophets

it is the sprite of angels

it is an attribute of the trustworthy

it is a sign of eternity of humanity

 

every soul desires perfection ,

but the quality reveals defection

every scholar is admitted to uplift honesty

for it will curse the suppressed disunity

repentance will not appeal forgiveness

unless an honest pleads out of guiltiness

 

commitment of a stubborn

is like a promise dissolving in a brook

but a word of a wise

is like a word tattooed on a rock

honesty is an inspiration of life on this earth of genesis

that will drive  away ignorance , inequality and prejudice

 

dishonesty is a key to misfortunes

which is accepted for granted out of boon

that could lead astray to theft , crimes , deception and terrorism

and will alter the world to a hell of blazing fires and criticism

 

 

 

© 2016 Tazeen Ahmed


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This is fantastic. Like holy smokes...

*commitment of a stubborn
is like a promise dissolving in a brook
but a word of a wise
is like a word tattooed on a rock*

That line REALLY got me, and the entire thing is just genius. Excellent metaphors and wordplay, well done. So much truth jammed into simple lines...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

7 Years Ago

Thank you a ton for visiting and reviewing!! :)
Chase Dylan

7 Years Ago

No problem. Keep at it!
I like the ideas you're expressing here. Everything is beautifully stated & crafted. My main issue: the first two stanzas are stated in language that sounds elevated & cerebral & analytical. This doesn't lend itself to capturing the reader's heart with more down-to-earth details about how it FEELS to be lied to or how it FEELS to hide some lie we've told. You finally start to express yourself in a more "connecting" way in the third stanza where you use some abstract imagery to suggest more of the feelings of what honesty might mean to someone.

It feels like I've read something from you before, something with a similar structure as the first two stanzas here, describing in a series of observations crafted using lots of complex words like this. I also love using complex words -- more than most readers can comprehend easily, making my stuff not an easy read, I've been told. So I understand the choice between loving vocabulary or wanting to be more relatable.

Posted 7 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tazeen Ahmed

7 Years Ago

Thank you! That's a constructive review and will surely help me out in my future poems...
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