Criticism

Criticism

A Poem by Tazeen Ahmed
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the journey from criticism to ...

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criticism reasoned anger

anger  ruptured into tears

emotions lashed the soul

silence prevailed far and wide

solemn, still, stormed

regret shattered the pain

a voice whispered through the winds

drastically overcoming whims

lessons were learnt

for the future to clean

the litters of past

 

 


© 2017 Tazeen Ahmed



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Loved it! It was simple and straightforward, that's the type of poetry I love most.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

3 Months Ago

I'm glad you liked it! Thank you so much for reading:)
Tazeen,
You seem to be wiser than your age, certainly skilled at expressing and powerfully descriptive word usage.
Reasoned, ruptured, lashed, stormed, shattered, etc; all create an atmospheric ambiance that not only commands attention, but attracts the mind into your moment in such a way that the reader becomes more deeply involved … excellent technique. Then, you left just the right amount up to the reader to fill in the blanks with their own understandings and needs.
A fine lesson you've blessed us with, too, of how to weather the storms and come out of them on top.
Think of "rupted" in comparison to "erupted" for which may express more power and flow … just an thought shared.

I love it, Tazeen … you've a very fine potential!
Keep your pen shined, full, and ready … big thank you hug! ⁓ Richard : )

Posted 4 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

4 Months Ago

Thank you! You've accurately analysed the true spirit of it. I'm blessed and encouraged. It made my .. read more
Richard

4 Months Ago

Lady Tazeen,
You have truly humbled and blessed me. ✨
extreemely adorable poem as well as tiny

Posted 6 Months Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tazeen Ahmed

6 Months Ago

Adorable in what sense?
It's tiny but its meaningful. It's about the time you're criticized a.. read more
Well written!
Capturing the true meaning for criticism
Well done.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

7 Months Ago

Thank you!
Joey Nizz

7 Months Ago

your welcome :)
A very clearly written stream of being, coupled with nice transitions and wordplay... Very nicely penned...

Posted 7 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

7 Months Ago

Thank you very much:)
Silente

7 Months Ago

You are very welcome
I enjoyed this! (Especially the style of the beginning. I wish it would have continued that way! So smart!) I.I.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much!!
Isabella Ivy

8 Months Ago

You're most welcome! I.I.
A poem with a very deep meaning and very relatable as well. I love it. :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

9 Months Ago

thank you!
I had to read this a couple of times before I 'got it' and then I really did! It perfectly describes our first response to criticism and then the results afterward.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

9 Months Ago

Thank you!
I'm glad you 'got it'!
You are appreciated :)
This is a powerful piece! And so realistic too! I think as long as it's constructive criticism it's good! Something other than that is downright destructive..
I liked reading this! Good work! ☺

Posted 9 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

9 Months Ago

I completely agree to that !
Sometimes it may prove to be destructive and painful but constru.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Indeed! You are welcome! Always a pleasure ☺
A very strong piece with an important and powerful message. A journey well depicted with all its stops and phases.
Though I was pondering over some structures. Like, I felt it should be "ruptured into tears" as that makes more sense. And "the winds" and "the litterS". Well that's minor and doesn't disrupt the flow.
Well written. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

9 Months Ago

Thank you Atiba for the constructive review !!
I will surely overcome the tiny mistakes
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The dark story

9 Months Ago

It's a pleasure :)

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