EPITOME OF DEATH

EPITOME OF DEATH

A Poem by Tazeen Ahmed

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Death is a bloody stream, penetrating valleys

Meandering with numerous forms, it betrays

Originating from intent causes, it sallies

It is a trap which cannot be escaped

 

The bickering warns the last glimpse

It curves and flows, tempered with tackling

Destined with injuries, it reconciles

A squeak follows silence of tears trickling

 

It commences its concealed voyage

As it slips and slithers; peeps and peeks

Fate forever flourishes fame in camouflage

As it flows with longing reminiscences

 

 

 


© 2017 Tazeen Ahmed



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You are right.
"The bickering warns the last glimpse
It curves and flows, tempered with tackling
Destined with injuries, it reconciles
A squeak follows silence of tears trickling"
I enjoyed the poem and the above lines. Logical and wise. Thank you Tazeen for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Months Ago


Slips and slithers... Peeps and peeks... Camouflage of fate... What a bickeringly good, deathly stroked write... Bloodily penned...

Posted 11 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

11 Months Ago

whoa! Thank you so much!
Silente

11 Months Ago

You are so welcome...!
you have an amazing way of enabling the reader to visualize. That takes skill by the way.
Something profound i got out of it by ways in which you articulated death. It dawned on me that maybe death is what is not natural in the whole scheme of things. great poem!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

11 Months Ago

I truly agree! It portrays unnatural death. However, one can relate natural death .
Thank you.. read more
I'm breathless with your words and imagery and how it all flows with your concept. "It is a trap which cannot be escaped" surely we all have this in common and share in the inevitability. Great write


Posted 11 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

11 Months Ago

Thank you Rosalee! I'm glad:)
Great rhythm, tons of imagery. I like it.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much ::))
beautiful poem and well written and great comparison..

Posted 11 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words... ::))
Very deep and so well written. I enjoyed the flow and the rhythm was excellent. It would a great poem to recite.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much Dara!
Wonderfully written...great work.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

11 Months Ago

Thank you Wajiha
Lovely work,
I like the last line in the first stanza, very true line..

Posted 12 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

11 Months Ago

I'm happy you liked it! Thank you😃
I think the overall idea in comparing death to a stream was a good one, and the image helped to complement that analogy.
You message shines through clearly - death is (for the most part) an unexpected occurance that almost everyone fears. I like how your wording shows that with phrases such as "bloody streams" and "destined with injuries."
I also enjoyed the moments of alliteration in phrases such as "tempered with tackling" and (most notably) "fate forever flourishes fame" ... playful use of words.
In all, a good poem. Well done.

- William Liston

Posted 12 Months Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

11 Months Ago

Thank you William for reading and bringing the whole idea out of this. I really appreciate your inde.. read more

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