Fated Flower

Something to think about... This was one of my first poems I ever wrote...

A flower blooms only once

Its the chance to shine

It shows off its glory,

Then its plucked

Oh what a crime!

This is the fate of all

So let everyone shine

Just don't shine too brightly,

Or you'll be picked from the vine...

Author's Note

Plz tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Livana Lowell]

Aw cool. Though it's wrong, I judge a poem by its length, and I usually don't like short poems, but this is pretty cute and witty. It hit me somewhere in my heart. I never really thought of something like that or looked at anything that way. This is truly unique. There are many perceptions to this. I see this in so many ways. I really love the ending as well. It leaves behind a sigh of wonderment for me. Really good job on this.

[Lorraine]

Another wonderful metaphor. Except for the occasional spelling errors, it's a pretty good poem. I like the way its shortness didn't hinder its content. And somehow, it has a tinge of warning tone that adds flavor.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[D. Pesek]

I love the ending! Great poem!

[Keriun]

hmm you've got a spelling error for "only" but i guess this is okay, although kinda short. For one of your first attempts, not too shabby.

[Aaron]

Its true and the metaphor here is very creative

[Passingdaze]

Very good poem. We all bloom,yet we are doomed to suffer 'the fate of all'. Maybe it's just me but I felt very cold after reading this. That is not meant to be taken in a bad way. We live and shine,we eventually die. It's what we do in the middle that makes us who and what we are. Great writing. Keep it up

[TeenRomance]

I love it! It's short but it gets the emotion across more than any 4-page poem would. I love the hint of dread the final warning gives!

[Vartul]

"I shows off its glory",it should be "It shows off its glory". Nevermind the typing mistakes, its a good piece! [Though too short :( ] keep working!