Gay life

About the pain, frustration & suffocation of being GAY in a Straight world

these shackles of shame they cut so deep
hurt my soul, don’t let me sleep

these mask I’ve worn, wear out my face
i’ve lost my looks, I’ve lost my faith

i’m only me, I’ve done no harm
just let me live with my lovers charm

this world is cruel, i can’t be you
i wish to God he’d turn me too

far away from this crippling weight
i only wish, that life was straight

but alas! it’s who I am
Why does the world need to give a damn?

Terence S

Reviews

[GreenShoes]

Your subject matter is never the problem with your poems; you speak from the heart and express yourself well, there are just some technical issues. You have some inconsistencies, I see:
I've
i've
I've
i'm
I've
i
i
i
I

There are people who use all lowercase in their poems, but they are consistent.

Also, in the second stanza, you said "these mask I've worn" - you mean 'these masks'. By the way, I've read SO many poems that talk about the 'masks we wear,' that it's really getting tiresome. As for the rhyme scheme, you have rhyming couplets except in the second stanza, which does not rhyme.

[Terence Sheque]

Thanks for the feedback.
Will work on the same.
Need to do some proof reading before posting.........the i was to emphasise the smallness the person feels ........Thanks

[Shweta]

It's nice...the message is clear and felt...